archived-videos "Fading" [15:12] - My SECOND short film ever. Feedback, please!

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7PbKj9K0Pwo

FADING - A Dramatic Short Film

“Two friends, Brennan and Jason, attempt to repair their broken friendship by attending a prestigious nature reserve called High Hills. When Brennan’s anger gets the best of him, the two find themselves lost in the deep woods with only each other to rely on.”

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You have more experience than me in making film, so take the following as the opinion of a layman.

My recommendation would be to remove superfluous repetition. That way, the pace would be faster, allowing you to better keep the viewers' attention. The surviving guy was angry a lot. I felt that it was longer than it had to be to tell the story.

I got the sense in the very beginning of the film that the one guy was a figure of the other guy's imagination - that it was all an hallucination. I suspect you wanted me to realise that later, but you didn't fool me.

I hope this helps!
 
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