There is no completed script here to read and I don't think will be posted even after been completed. The reason for that is that the script is NOT in English. I will probably put English subtitles after I produce the short.
As of now, I really would like to share my short story with you and have a feedback, suggestions or advise.
While I keep on righting the script everyday, I start to realize how difficult it is to find THE BEST way to SHOW the same story. Before telling it, let me give you some background so you can see a bigger picture.
This is a true story that happened to me when I was about 16-17 years old. There were many currency exchange bureaus (herein and after simply "exchange") in my country before. There are still enough of exchanges, but not as much as before. Although mostly national currency was used to purchase anything here, there were (and still are) some people who tend to keep some money in US Dollars and convert it to national currency to use. I mean this was and still is a common practice for my area.
Here is the story.
A boy was given a 100 USD banknote. He was told to get HALF (50 USD) back as DOLLARS and convert the remaining half to a national currency. The boy goes to an exchange office, tells a cashier to give 50 USD back and convert the remaining 50 USD to a national currency. The cashier completes the exchange and gives the funds to the boy. The boy is in a hurry and runs back home not counting his money. At home, before handing over the money to his parents he counts the money in front of them and everybody finds out that the cashier gave an EXCESS money to the boy. The cashier returned 50 USD to the boy and, by mistake, gave him national currency in a sum equal to 100USD, instead of 50.
The parents are happy, they tell the boy that this is God's will, and that the boy has every right to use the excess money for his own needs. But the boy is NOT happy at all. He tries to explain to his parents that God gave him and intelligence to understand that this is just a mistake and he can correct it by simply returning the excess portion.
So, the boy returns to the exchange and approaches the cashier telling him that he made a mistake. Since the cashier thinks the boy is back due to a lack in his money, he goes wild not letting the boy to complete his sentence. The cashier shouts at the boy saying there is no way he can make a mistake. He stresses to the boy that funds to be counted at the cashier desk before leaving and if the boy did not count them this is not cashier's problem. Overall, before the boy even tried to tell about THE EXCESS of the money, the cashier shouts "GET OUT!!!". Other people in the exchange office put a pressing on a boy accusing him of a probable cheating or loosing his money and now importuning poor cashier.
The climax occurs when the boy through his tears cries out loud that he came to give THE EXCESS of the money.
I have some vision on how to put the story up.
Let's start by a list of roles:
1) BOY (15-16)
2) WOMAN (35) - BOY's mother
3) WOMAN (65) - BOY's granny
4) GIRL (18-19) - BOY's sister
5) MAN (40) - CASHIER
6) EXTRAS
So the boy is in a "hurry-up" situation and must be back home quickly. Then there is a "GOOD" news of MORE money. Then there is BOY's wish to get money back. Then a conflict with this mother, supported by his sister NOT to let the boy to get the money back. Then Granny supports the boy and he takes the money back. He is happy because the mistake is going to be corrected. Then there is a conflict with the cashier that the boy did not even expected. Then EXTRAS attack him with their "bad boy" messages. Finally the boy tells what he is back for.
I would be happy to get PLOT ideas that can tell this story dramatically, realistically with some suspense or something similar.
As of now, I really would like to share my short story with you and have a feedback, suggestions or advise.
While I keep on righting the script everyday, I start to realize how difficult it is to find THE BEST way to SHOW the same story. Before telling it, let me give you some background so you can see a bigger picture.
This is a true story that happened to me when I was about 16-17 years old. There were many currency exchange bureaus (herein and after simply "exchange") in my country before. There are still enough of exchanges, but not as much as before. Although mostly national currency was used to purchase anything here, there were (and still are) some people who tend to keep some money in US Dollars and convert it to national currency to use. I mean this was and still is a common practice for my area.
Here is the story.
A boy was given a 100 USD banknote. He was told to get HALF (50 USD) back as DOLLARS and convert the remaining half to a national currency. The boy goes to an exchange office, tells a cashier to give 50 USD back and convert the remaining 50 USD to a national currency. The cashier completes the exchange and gives the funds to the boy. The boy is in a hurry and runs back home not counting his money. At home, before handing over the money to his parents he counts the money in front of them and everybody finds out that the cashier gave an EXCESS money to the boy. The cashier returned 50 USD to the boy and, by mistake, gave him national currency in a sum equal to 100USD, instead of 50.
The parents are happy, they tell the boy that this is God's will, and that the boy has every right to use the excess money for his own needs. But the boy is NOT happy at all. He tries to explain to his parents that God gave him and intelligence to understand that this is just a mistake and he can correct it by simply returning the excess portion.
So, the boy returns to the exchange and approaches the cashier telling him that he made a mistake. Since the cashier thinks the boy is back due to a lack in his money, he goes wild not letting the boy to complete his sentence. The cashier shouts at the boy saying there is no way he can make a mistake. He stresses to the boy that funds to be counted at the cashier desk before leaving and if the boy did not count them this is not cashier's problem. Overall, before the boy even tried to tell about THE EXCESS of the money, the cashier shouts "GET OUT!!!". Other people in the exchange office put a pressing on a boy accusing him of a probable cheating or loosing his money and now importuning poor cashier.
The climax occurs when the boy through his tears cries out loud that he came to give THE EXCESS of the money.
I have some vision on how to put the story up.
Let's start by a list of roles:
1) BOY (15-16)
2) WOMAN (35) - BOY's mother
3) WOMAN (65) - BOY's granny
4) GIRL (18-19) - BOY's sister
5) MAN (40) - CASHIER
6) EXTRAS
So the boy is in a "hurry-up" situation and must be back home quickly. Then there is a "GOOD" news of MORE money. Then there is BOY's wish to get money back. Then a conflict with this mother, supported by his sister NOT to let the boy to get the money back. Then Granny supports the boy and he takes the money back. He is happy because the mistake is going to be corrected. Then there is a conflict with the cashier that the boy did not even expected. Then EXTRAS attack him with their "bad boy" messages. Finally the boy tells what he is back for.
I would be happy to get PLOT ideas that can tell this story dramatically, realistically with some suspense or something similar.
The boy is on his way to the exchange, but he does not know he is chased by his mother. (suspense goes on)