Ending Idea, looking for some feedback..

Semiazas

Semiazas

I've thought of an idea for an ending to my short film and I'm looking for some feedback on it.
The basic principle is (as any who have read my others threads on this project will know) about a prison psychologist interrogating a serial killer.
At this point I've had the killer establish the fear that is within the psychologist.
So I had the idea of the ending being the serial killer saying something like :

"There is one way for you to conquer fear. The way I did. And then you might understand what it's like to be me when I am about to die."

Then the psychologist moves around to the serial killer and moves to kill him, and that's when the scene fades to black.

Thoughts?
 
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I don't buy it!

Why would the psychologist be afraid? Nothing was established from this thread or the others for any reason that the psychologist would be afraid. He's a psychologist, this is his job, this isn't the first time to talk to an inmate.

Secondly, why would the psychologist kill the inmate? Again, this just seems so out of character. You have never put in any rhyme or reason for this.

The psychologist being conscious of his actions would never do this. He's in a prison, there are guards around so he would get caught. His life would be ruined and in turn he would be arrested.

It doesn't make much sense of what you are going for. Which is why in the other thread I mentioned cluttering the inmates cell with books on dark magic, the dark arts and voodoo. At least that would scratch the surface at establishing a reason why the psychologist would be about to commit this act of crime.

Even then, it wouldn't make much sense that the inmate would possess the psychologist and take over his consciousness and in turn kill the inmate.
 
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Im not in on the other thread, so meh...

I COULD see this solving ONE of Opus's concerns: The entire last "session" with the psychologist we keep the action real close, when the dr stands up to go behind the patient, we discover that the patient is on a stretcher and the dr administers the Death Sentence Lethal Injection under the eye of the prison officials.
 
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I don't oboe f this is the ending I'll be using I'm just spitballing ideas based around it as I'm unsure of how to end it.
I had the idea that maybe the 'fear' is not of 'the killer himself but that 'the way he tries to think like them (sociopaths) makes him... Fearful he could become something like that.

Thoughts?
 
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Dunno, man, the whole serial killer thing just seems derivative to me. To make a film about such a cliche topic, you should

1) Have a good reason for it
2) Have an original twist

What's more cliche than serial killers? Vampires? Detectives? It's probably one of the most cliche topics out there, which means there's almost nothing you can do that's original. A serial killer that wants to be normal? Dexter. A serial killer who is intelligent and likable? Hannibal. There are more examples. Why can't you write about something new, something creative?

And one more thing, while I'm ranting, ask yourself, what is driving you to make this film? Do you have a passion for it and would you want to watch it? Will this be just another heavy-handed joyless amateur drama?

Because if you don't have a passion for the story, it will show. If you make it because it is something you would love to see (that we haven't seen before), it will show.
 
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