Edit suggestions?

[dlevanchuk]

Shot a short about the consequences of loosing a sock during your laundry.. Supposed to be comedic thriller..


Still working on sound, but as far as editing or light, should I add something else to made the story more "rich", or more interesting?

Btw, I'm aware of a little cgi glitch at the end.. Fixed it already, but haven't uploaded it yet.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=youtube_gdata_player&v=__f8a4R2hKM

Comments? Suggestions?

 

[CamVader]

Pretty cool! I would have racked the door opening, but really solid.

 

[Zensteve]

Is the flashy-light effect supposed to be that "broken lights in basement" look? 'cos if it is, it could be a lot sharper.

The girl's face at about 0:26 is really dramatic, btw. Classic uh-oh moment, for the viewer.

Blood hits the camera lens - are we supposed to be POV inside the washing machine?

Is this the film in entirety, btw?

should I add something else to made the story more "rich",

There's no real story, so far. Woman gets shot; sock gets away.

Why did our sock commit this atrocity? What did the woman do to deserve it? Did she deserve it? Who (& what) are they, and what is their relationship to each other?!

If that's all you're shooting, you could whip up a v/o to help explain things a bit. (If you're shooting more material, then it's probably all good)