archived-videos Comedy Short Film

Not bad! Much better than the last.

I liked the concept, and I thought the cinematography, acting, writing, and overall pacing was nice. Although there were some poorly lit, and the apartment didn't look the most appealing (clean it up, light it). A more elaborate lottery ticket and perhaps some Foley might help as well.
 
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Hey thanks a lot for the feedback guys! It's always so helpful to get input form people, and I couldn't agree with your suggestions more.

Jake
 
Honestly, I think some simple editing skills could clean this a lot!

Utilize some free tutorials on Youtube such as FilmRiot, and possibly add some L-cuts in there ( a simple editing trick to clean up dialogue and transitions between clips)

Other than that, great work!

Cameron
 
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