So hey guys, this is my first post on the forums but I had a question. I'm currently working with a group of people on making a TV show that will be crossing large desks in nice offices in less than two weeks. I've been given the opportunity to take the pilot and fix the terrible cold open it had, before it's given to a certain well-known comic book writer/television writer. So, in the rough draft, the opener is supposed to establish how the world works in this fictional universe, but the way it is in the rough draft, the first chunk of dialogue is a monster of a paragraph.
Nine bland, uninteresting, sentences that go something like 'You just don't understand...back in my day, things were a whole lot different...These people are such a huge threat to civil society and our government is barely doing anything about it.' It always makes the writer in me die a little when I read it. I want to change the opener to be something much more subtle, showing through action, rather than through dialogue. Even though the characters in the scene are just throwaway characters, I don't want them to feel as absolutely useless as they do as it is.
So, my question is this: How much exposition in a cold open should be told through Dialogue alone? I know how it should feel in my head, but I'm just looking for an outside opinion, because the other two writers on the project are hard to work with when it comes to changes.
Thanks!
Nine bland, uninteresting, sentences that go something like 'You just don't understand...back in my day, things were a whole lot different...These people are such a huge threat to civil society and our government is barely doing anything about it.' It always makes the writer in me die a little when I read it. I want to change the opener to be something much more subtle, showing through action, rather than through dialogue. Even though the characters in the scene are just throwaway characters, I don't want them to feel as absolutely useless as they do as it is.
So, my question is this: How much exposition in a cold open should be told through Dialogue alone? I know how it should feel in my head, but I'm just looking for an outside opinion, because the other two writers on the project are hard to work with when it comes to changes.
Thanks!