archived-videos Borderline Web Series

The beginning is too long and drawn out...too much text. Then when we get into the images, they are also too static. Even though you had flickery layers going on...nothing is really happening. You need to find a way to draw your viewer in, and not let them lose interest.

The voice is good...and spooky. But the trailer doesn't pull you in enough. Don't let this discourage you...keep it up.
 
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