archived-videos 'Always' Silent 16mm Short Film - Feedback Appreciated

[directorrobertooliveri]

Hey Guys,
I've just finished my first narrative film at university and was wondering if i could get some feedback. Our task was to create a short film based on a haiku given to us ours being 'Long Ago, The Mirror Fogs, A Name Forgotten, Faintly Reappears' All the sound was non sync and added in post production.

Hope you enjoy it.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VrFIeDDDhLY&list=UUkUq4JRh5MhDjU147ESZrKQ&index=1&feature=plcp

 

[Zensteve]

Short & sweet. Liked it a lot.

 

[StudentFilmmaker]

There were some small details that I didn't particularly like, but the thing that counts was that you told a beautiful story without words.

 

[directorrobertooliveri]

What was it that you particularly didn't like? I appreciate the positive feedback