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Lily Blaze

Lily Blaze

I had a recent not so great experience. A filmmaker want to film a low-budget short script of mine. All gun-ho. Then screwed me around. I know, many filmmakers are more reliable than that. I've cut ties and moved on.

So, anyone interested in a short? Tiny coast, tinier location. I wrote it as a proof of concept for a feature that's my homage to David Lynch and as a part of my grieving process. The short is complete within itself. Might be festival ready. Any takers?
 
Title: Fragment

Logline: After losing a friend, an artist enters a dreamlike spiral, and she must confront the meaning of her own life to find a way forward.
 
Oh cool! I like it. I would just change the word and to where, so the dreamlike state (spiral) is more like a world.

After losing a friend, an artist enters a dreamlike spiral, where she must confront the meaning of her own life to find a way forward.
 
Thanks!

After losing a friend, an artist enters a dreamlike spiral, and she must confront the meaning of her own life to find a way forward.

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If you read mine again you can see where I changed the word, no biggie, it just adds to the dreamlike state imo.
 
Ah, gotcha. Fixed and thanks!

After losing a friend, an artist enters a dreamlike spiral, where she must confront the meaning of her own life to find a way forward.
 
Yes I like that a lot. "Where" adds to the state of mind as if it is an alternate world/reality.
 
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