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Logline: A runaway fends for his life against supernatural forces who seek to eliminate him before he can achieve his destiny. Link to script:https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VUqvTiS1xxtH0GwAOQujkX27Txa4Eq4_/view?usp=sharing 1. Do I have a clear conflict? 2...

Really appreciate this advice all - thank you so much

I've written and created one short film in 2018 - since then life and work have got in the way(became a teacher during the pandemic so lots of my free time was taken up but looking to use my time better). I am trying to get back on track pursuing this dream as its a new year but my questions to...

Link to Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1erHMq1cDGX9xZyTx1Z7bx6BP_ycaO_G-/view?usp=sharing So I feel pretty pleased with this first draft I wrote, I think the storyline is interesting. LOGLINE: When a young man sees his mother killed by a member of the notorious Roundtable, he will stop...

T Thank you for this, is helpful - I may take to storyboarding scenes before I write in the future.

Thank you for the feedback - I'm going to go back to the drawing board of my outline and rethink my main theme - I wanted to ask - what would the proper formatting be for a series of shots and how is that different to a montage? When referring to adjectives when describing characters is there a...

So I've decided to try and write a feature film (1 hr 30 mins) and I'd appreciate feedback on what I have written so far. LOGLINE: A cautious librarian and his best friend are forced to work with the Resistance, after being involved in a car chase lead by their charismatic leader, a loud and...

Logline: A leader of a criminal organisation realises that he has fallen for the wrong woman, his best friend's girlfriend. Link to the script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1c_2ZaIdpMPF_buaBbZzu4JIzR0viTIPP/view?usp=sharing Would really appreciate feedback on the following: Do I have a...

How do I write shorter , more pacy action lines - lots of the critique I am getting is that I am using longer lines which make it harder for people to get through my work and that I could say things in a more simple way? I acknowledge this as a problem but I'm struggling to fix this - I also...

I have also made changes to the original script I have sent: Hopefully the action lines are shorter now? https://drive.google.com/file/d/19g6IkKkikWx5K-AxkYWQujSH7wodWo5i/view?usp=sharing

Thank you for the feedback. This has been really helpful. I wanted to ask a question regarding parallel spacing. How can I do this more effectively? I thought witholding information is good for the supernatural/mystery genre also? Are there any scripts you recommend reading so that I can get...

Any ideas?

Pretty sure you can borrow and steal. For example, both DC and Marvel have similar ideas/themes/characters with the exact same skillset but different personalities

Would really appreciate feedback about the following: Is the plot small enough for a small short film or are there too many moving parts? Are the characters interesting? How can I make them better? How can I improve my dialogue? What are your thoughts on my action lines? Does my story have...

Thoughts on this version: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rCIppG0SX0AXc1EEq6d5DrFv-1JE2VLt/view?usp=sharing Planning to do a swab for grammar and spag errors but I've tried to tidy up the plot and cut out some dialogue

FEEDBACK Took a writing hiatus of two/three months but decided to get back on the saddle by doing short bursts and eventually finished this short film screenplay. Would really appreciate feedback on what I've written? Its intended to be a low budget short film but I was wondering about the...

So as a basis for the short film I'm writing, its about a young man who disguises himself as an electrician to infiltrate the house of the politician he feels is responsible for his wife's disappearance - my main problem is how to communicate her disappearance seeing as she is vanished from...

I have this idea for an animated short film but I am not an animator - is it worth sinking time into this if I want to be a writer/director or am I bet off working on something that I can actually produce physical work in the form of a film? At the moment, I've made one short film and two...

How best can a screenwriter prep themselves for the longer writing haul of a feature? I've written a few shorts but I'm struggling to finish the feature as I feel like my act 1 is just not working and also does anyone have any tips for action lines - how can I make them less complicated? I...

Link to Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1-rN_vlZe1n19FXssSxVDvf_gRVdmrfBa/view?usp=sharing Logline: A young soldier is forced to go on the run with the boisterous leader of a guerrilla group striking against The Well - an organisation dedicated to capturing Telekinetics called Movers...