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Hey guys, looking for some feedback on my short. It's a 5 page emotional drama piece with the slightest touch of the surreal. LOGLINE: A grieving couple coming to terms with the mysterious disappearance of their son discover they are already expecting again. They must endeavour to move forward...

It is excellent. I love the lighting, music and dramatic imagery. Really well executed and professional.

Thank you for your feedback. The movie does eventually culminate in a run from the law as his dreams predict but it isn't the main scope of the story, it is more a psychological adventure. As for Dan Harmons circle, that's a good point and I do think I've followed that in this script with the...

Hey there, watched all the shorts on your page. Some really good stuff I thought. I think the Family business one has the potential there for a longer film perhaps, I can imagine the uncle being the orchestrator of his own demise through his recklessness and desperation. Toiletking was a...

I liked it, found it quite humorous. Like others have said, not too sure about the ending though. I liked the suggestion someone else made about him buying stock in himself or you could do something along the lines of him robbing businesses at laptop-point. Threatening to buy their stock unless...

Why do you mention if using a Mac? Why is it different for a PC/laptop using Windows? Also, with all of these options, are they web based so you can access from multiple devices?

Thanks. I signed up and uploaded a short film I had saved in a doc. file, it formatted it all for me correctly. Birlliant! It does say my current free version ends in a week tough so not sure what happens after that exactly, do I just lose some features of whatever "package" they've started me...

I appreciate the feedback. I'm glad you found it captured your interest. Still need to do a lot more work to get it up to a standard I'm happy with but honest feedback from other writers will hopefully help get me there. Also, will also take a look in Trelby. Thanks for the recommendation.

Hey there, gave it a read over. Few minor observations firstly - - Sounds in your descriptions should be in CAPS. i.e. SCREAMS are heard. - page 3. Pours not pores. - page 3. "for you or the baby" - page 5. steel not steal. - page 5. Not sure what you mean by "maybe" a few stickers. Just say...

Hi Ollie, many thanks for taking the time to read it and for your feedback. In reply to your first question, I've just used a generic word processor program for this initial screenplay unfortunately. I'm planning to fork out for a copy of Final Draft at some point, have heard I can import a...

Not an experienced writer, but for what it's worth I really like the premise of your story. Not sure if that's how you intend play the story out in full but personally I would delve further into her relationship with Kyle. Perhaps make it a story of co-habitual drug use before she sees the road...

I'm not an expert like many of the guys on here but for what its worth, here is my feedback - You mention "body" twice in the first sentence, delete one of the references. Your descriptions are trying to be evocative but I would suggest you say more with less. Keep it concise. Also, you cannot...

Hi, recently finished my first feature length screenplay. It is a sci-fi thriller with an edge of dry humour. I'm posting the first 10 minutes of the script. Would really appreciate some feedback from any kind person who is willing to give their time to read it.

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