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    character How do you write an ethnic character?

    The issue of putting in good ethnic characters is very difficult indeed. It depends on how deep the characters are involved. If it just a brief meeting, or they just fill the space - it is easier. There can be spaghetti eating Italians, or vine drinking French or Irish with Guinness. However...
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    logline Which One Sounds Interesting?

    I think that as a result of a collective brainstorm, this one has a good potential. I think that Mexican cartels are somewhat tired topic these days, so I would actually move the action to 1870s, Wild West, the treasure is army money left by general Custer, and you will have actually competing...
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    pre-production New Financing Plan for Short Film

    I can't overemphasize importance of acting and good actors. I understand that movie is an indie movie, but I hope that you will have proper auditions, good actors can make or break the movie!
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    logline Which One Sounds Interesting?

    To be earnest, none of this seem interesting, for me, of course, but then I don't share the drug theme, maybe except 1, but then it perhaps sounds a bit familiar, as the supposed killer of the family turns into a protector, something like Kurt Russell in the sci-fi (forgot the name, perhaps...
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    story advice/feedback - first steps into the story

    Just a polite reminder that a script is not a poem, doesn't need to be written in poetic language etc. It is the story which may be poetic, but not the script itself, which is a series of condensed dialogues and description of actions - that description never looks like a poem, at least as far...
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    pre-production New Financing Plan for Short Film

    Well, I am not sure if my experience (both good and bad) could be useful, but after 2 TV series, a documentary and a feature, which I worked as a producer, I would summarize 1. The general budgeting scheme you mentioned, based on hours/wages is fine (though I didn't see the...
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    story Maps of Meaning

    pretty interesting discussion. Origins of fear as roots for storytelling is an interesting subject. Fear, I guess, is very subjective thing, so it is given that people disagree. I liked Peterson's analysis of Harry Potter's story as an exploration of fear, which is programmed by human genetics...
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    story advice/feedback - first steps into the story

    Susan, I read the piece and that's my frank impressions. 1. you have to decide the genre first. Horror, or romantic fantasy? The scenes in the draft may lead to both directions, but it is only you who can decide. So decide first. 2. There is a number of time travel movies and stories, starting...
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    plot Tried to create a plot

    ok. Might be a good idea, though I saw a movie with a similar plot you've described and the bad thing is that action is moved by not by the main lead, so the movie becomes a movie about the crazy guy
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    plot Tried to create a plot

    No offense, but where is comedy? :)
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    story CONFUSION

    Um, since you are from India..how about this? In 1852, a british governess, Ms. Rose Whitmore, is hired by an Indian maharaja to teach English to his son, a prince. Prince will attend Oxford later, so he has to improve his English. Rose has at first hard time getting used to Indian customs...
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    plot Lily Fire

    Oh I see. I probably missed that part. Yeah, I played my part of FPS games, so I see what you mean and that VR shade is probably good idea.
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    story CONFUSION

    What type of story you looking for? I mean, romance, action, mystery?
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    plot Lily Fire

    No, you set Bambie as a victim of abuse (but we don't know what exactly happened. If she is Lily, we know her family was killed). Just imagine that Bambie is actually Lily, a girl, whose family was killed by mobsters. Lily/Bambie probably was never sold to the school - she may joined...
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    plot Lily Fire

    Yeah, I'd preferred this development, but co-producer disagreed and we never could get a satisfying ending :) Actually Lily could be Bambie in another your story.
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    plot Lily Fire

    I once wrote a script with somewhat similar development (but with a bit different setup), but had disagreement with another producer and it never went further. The key moment was whether we make the victim (girl or Lily here) into a killer here or leave her being true to her nature as an...
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    plot Assassin School for Girls

    This has signs of a great story. I'd recommend you to watch two S.Korean movies "Shiri", "Secretly, Greatly" and "Commitment", both with a premise of North Korean spy/killer school for teenagers, who are later sent to South Korea for secret missions. I recommend because they use the similar...
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    critique 9 Page Children's Fantasy (Witches)

    Actually, it was a good movie, I quite enjoyed it and visuals were... um...attractive :) The Korean flick is actually TV drama, 16 episodes. Visuals are also...um...attractive :)
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    critique 9 Page Children's Fantasy (Witches)

    seems like a hot topic nowadays! Netflix just released (not sure if in US) a witch rom com "It is ok to be not ok" (S.Korea), which has great Burton type visuals!
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    Lawyer turned screenwriter

    Actually, we have similar professional background! I also work at a bank and an economist by trade :)
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