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And i have to pause to notice: dang, that's some fancy formatting--a visual representation of a state, a chain of different shades of thought and memory and feeling, a bit melancholy, trailing off, dimmer and dimmer, into infinity. :)

Honestly, CR, that's enough for me. These excerpts are shared not just for critiques (although I certainly do appreciate any) but also because I hoped someone might enjoy them. As a would-be writer, I know I wouldn't be for everybody, but, to get any pages at all, I have to be able to imagine...

Or no one cares: Do i remember a joke, where somebody was reincarnated as the original Darren on Bewitched? Edit: actually, to say nobody cared is untrue and a bit cruel of me. Original Darren was a big part of the show's success, reportedly battled chronic pain for as long as he could...

Yup. New Jake kills it :)

Cool. Thanks. 'The quality of what you've shown, the voice work and the concept art, is engaging.

This is kind of interesting. Back in the day, i remember, watching TV with friends and family, and every 10 minutes or so, just stoping for, often just staring through, a commercial. Then came TIVO, watching everything on delay, and fast forward through the commercials. Then the streamers. TV...

Good luck. I hope you make it. The voice acting in the clip is strong. And I like the art. It looks like real human-created stuff. But my impression is that it is like a film of a graphic novel. Is this a thing? Maybe, in your campaign, a bit of clarification, here. And i admire, actually...

Bummer about Jake--classic show biz story of betrayal, lol. It's always struck me as odd, that some of the funniest things on the you tube are insurance company commercials. i still get a kick out of this one; (Ke-ah-no, lol) Then there's the surrealism of Emu and Doug. WTF? And...

Unlike years past, I guess I have to see these movies now, after the fact. Somehow I'm a little embarrassed about that, lol.

One more bit from the script about Kothen, that "little princely residential town, often mockingly dubbed 'Cow Cöthen,'" *, about Leopold, prince of Kothen, and about Leopold's musical director, his Kapellemeister, JS Bach, For me, just the act of getting a scene together, in order to post it...

"If ya got it flaunt it." "It" being an overwhelming supply of vulgarity.

Yup. What, for me, keeps the Godfather on this side of greatness, is that it feels written.

This one may be sacrilege, but...the Godfather? Every scene, one after the next after the next, exactly as you remember them. It feels a bit, now, episodic, as if the whole is less than the sum of its parts. And Michael's journey, once you know it's there, seems telegraphed, a bit plotty, kind...

OMG. WTF. And the dog too? I almost just don't want to know. And Hoosiers--as good as it gets.

And... Maybe one of the little kids, maybe both, can at this point make the sign of the cross, mistaking a curse for a prayer, before Sebastian ushers them away. This might be a memorable little comic moment. Edit: just realized I thought this was funny because i think Rod and Todd Flanders...

Just changed "Another moan from the next room," to " A cry from the next room--Maria Barbara (O.S.): "Lord Jesus Christ!" Way better :)

Thanks, sfoster, for reading and taking the time to leave a note. Yea, in writing about the 1720s I have had to learn a lot of stuff, little questions, here and there, like: What kind of hat would this person be wearing? Would little Carl Philippe Emanuel Bach have been called Carl, Philippe...

Has old school CG just gone the way of the typewriter? Stop-motion?

No sweat. (And sorry to whine, lol.) And don't knock yourself out. It just motivates me, a little, to think of something being read by someone other than Spike. Just a word, (something like "Masterful!") is fine. :)

And here, the first minutes of the second scene, to "when he wills," at 4:45. (And if you watch, make sure the CC is on.) And guys, this, the NBS's beautiful production, makes me leak from my eyes. And if it doesn't make anyone else so leak, or at least lean toward such leakage . . . It is...