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    critique Motormouth, a short script I’d appreciate critique on

    Don’t mind this, poorly formatted and written, may reupload at a later date!
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    critique Friendly Spirits, a short 2 page script – any critique appreciated

    Thanks gecko, yes this is directly from a short story, I’m still striving to learn proper screenplay formatting. I appreciate your help!
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    critique Friendly Spirits, a short 2 page script – any critique appreciated

    Thank you for taking a look, and thanks for the link. I appreciate it very much!
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    critique Friendly Spirits, a short 2 page script – any critique appreciated

    I originally wrote this story in response to a writing prompt, and adapted it for screen. I apologize for the wonky formatting, I couldn’t get Celtx to email the pdf to me. Thanks for looking! 🙂 https://docs.google.com/document/d/11UFgYlGUk6k56b-kQ9fjddvhqNjOR2VVcdRhAX9mUVo/edit
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    watch 2007 | A Short Film

    Great short film!
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    Really? That's great, I was about to give up on it. I have an awesome story I just wrote, but I want to practice filmmaking a little bit before I bite off more than I chew. Thanks directorik, I feel a little more confident about going forward with it. Just got the actors a minute ago, awesome!
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    Thanks for the detailed feedback, I appreciate it. After these critiques, I feel there are too many problems with the story to futz with it any more. I have plenty of other stories to work with, and I already have 3 short scripts written. I might just start from scratch... Thanks again guys!
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    Thanks a lot guys, awesome points. I just rewrote a bunch of it with your feedback in mind. I tried to make the reveal more natural, instead of just a "random Chinese delivery man". If you have any other thoughts I'd love to hear. Thanks again!
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    Thanks a lot for the feedback. I tried my best to copy the format of a screenplay I found online. And I'm typing it up in a google doc... probably shouldn't be doing that. Think I'll buy the Fade In screenwriting program to work with. Thanks for the tip.
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    Thanks bald man. I just edited the post to make all of that clear. Hope you enjoy reading it.
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    critique BackTrack Short Script critique requested

    This is a very short script for a film I will be shooting some time early next year. Page length: 4 pages Synopsis: James and his girlfriend Natasmai have a funny relationship. She can understand him, but James doesn’t know her language. When he finds out what’s on her mind, his world is...
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    Hello folks!

    Hi there, I'm a copywriter living in Baltimore. I've been writing fiction for 18 years, and just started shooting films again. Looking forward to contributing to the indie talk fraternity. All the best, –J.R.
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