I originally wrote this story in response to a writing prompt, and adapted it for screen. I apologize for the wonky formatting, I couldn’t get Celtx to email the pdf to me. Thanks for looking! 🙂
https://docs.google.com/document/d/11UFgYlGUk6k56b-kQ9fjddvhqNjOR2VVcdRhAX9mUVo/edit
Really? That's great, I was about to give up on it.
I have an awesome story I just wrote, but I want to practice filmmaking a little bit before I bite off more than I chew.
Thanks directorik, I feel a little more confident about going forward with it.
Just got the actors a minute ago, awesome!
Thanks for the detailed feedback, I appreciate it.
After these critiques, I feel there are too many problems with the story to futz with it any more.
I have plenty of other stories to work with, and I already have 3 short scripts written.
I might just start from scratch...
Thanks again guys!
Thanks a lot guys, awesome points.
I just rewrote a bunch of it with your feedback in mind. I tried to make the reveal more natural, instead of just a "random Chinese delivery man".
If you have any other thoughts I'd love to hear. Thanks again!
Thanks a lot for the feedback.
I tried my best to copy the format of a screenplay I found online. And I'm typing it up in a google doc... probably shouldn't be doing that.
Think I'll buy the Fade In screenwriting program to work with. Thanks for the tip.
This is a very short script for a film I will be shooting some time early next year.
Page length: 4 pages
Synopsis: James and his girlfriend Natasmai have a funny relationship. She can understand him, but James doesn’t know her language. When he finds out what’s on her mind, his world is...
Hi there, I'm a copywriter living in Baltimore.
I've been writing fiction for 18 years, and just started shooting films again.
Looking forward to contributing to the indie talk fraternity.
All the best,
–J.R.