Rating a screenplay
Hello,
I think some of you know that I have been working on a screenplay for a while and been learning along the way thanks to people's advice on this site. I have been currently rewriting in order to try to improve it and I have done it part by part. I try to improve one part before going to the next so that I can implement what I have learned for the future parts. I have an old post a while ago where I want to post parts of my screenplay so then other novice writers can look at the transitions between my first draft to hopefully what is a tighter screenplay.
So I have a link to the first part of the screenplay "Fragments of a Broken Heart" which is 40 pages below. I like to ask people if they can rate the first part of the screenplay out of 10, 1 for poor and ten for best. Don't be afraid to post your rating, I need the truth in order to keep improving (but don't be surprised if i stand outside your front porch tomorrow lol). Read as much as you like and if anyone wants me to read their screenplay then I am more than happy to if they want an exchange of feedback.
The logline: A traditional animation feature, when a tsunami kills his parents, a teenage Japanese boy must deal with the loss and move on with his younger sister in his care.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B32svqt43-9nOUYyU2lIQ3pVN2M/edit?usp=sharing
Thank you
Hello,
I think some of you know that I have been working on a screenplay for a while and been learning along the way thanks to people's advice on this site. I have been currently rewriting in order to try to improve it and I have done it part by part. I try to improve one part before going to the next so that I can implement what I have learned for the future parts. I have an old post a while ago where I want to post parts of my screenplay so then other novice writers can look at the transitions between my first draft to hopefully what is a tighter screenplay.
So I have a link to the first part of the screenplay "Fragments of a Broken Heart" which is 40 pages below. I like to ask people if they can rate the first part of the screenplay out of 10, 1 for poor and ten for best. Don't be afraid to post your rating, I need the truth in order to keep improving (but don't be surprised if i stand outside your front porch tomorrow lol). Read as much as you like and if anyone wants me to read their screenplay then I am more than happy to if they want an exchange of feedback.
The logline: A traditional animation feature, when a tsunami kills his parents, a teenage Japanese boy must deal with the loss and move on with his younger sister in his care.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B32svqt43-9nOUYyU2lIQ3pVN2M/edit?usp=sharing
Thank you
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