Hello,
I have been quite busy writing a feature length screenplay (Which I have almost completed) and in-between written a short film screenplay that I want to show to you and ask for feedback on it.
This story is kind of important to me personally as it is loosely based on my mum's experience (though in the story I have not included a daughter).
My ambition is to get this story animated but before I get ahead of myself, there is a lot of things I need to work on in this short script. I still need to polish it and re-write it to make it tighter and should be able to condense from 8 pages to less.
But what I am asking for at the moment is for story structure of the film and whether you believe it flows nicely. After that I will work on the polishing and rewriting to make it tighter. But my main aim was to write a story as few pages possible due to potential budget, so that is why I am asking if story structure for this film is ok?
Thank you
https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B32svqt43-9nNmZIYjViaFN5SXc/edit
I have been quite busy writing a feature length screenplay (Which I have almost completed) and in-between written a short film screenplay that I want to show to you and ask for feedback on it.
This story is kind of important to me personally as it is loosely based on my mum's experience (though in the story I have not included a daughter).
My ambition is to get this story animated but before I get ahead of myself, there is a lot of things I need to work on in this short script. I still need to polish it and re-write it to make it tighter and should be able to condense from 8 pages to less.
But what I am asking for at the moment is for story structure of the film and whether you believe it flows nicely. After that I will work on the polishing and rewriting to make it tighter. But my main aim was to write a story as few pages possible due to potential budget, so that is why I am asking if story structure for this film is ok?
Thank you
https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B32svqt43-9nNmZIYjViaFN5SXc/edit