Would love to have feedback on this pilot. Logline: A young bully is dragged into a global conflict where earth battles against an otherworldly force after a series of asteroids fall on every continent in the world. Link to script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Afsk3T9MIRTyMsehqj3qsvzoSRiN6p7R/view?usp=sharing 1. Do I have a clear conflict? 2. Does my main character have a character arc? Are my characters compelling? (Not sure how possible this is in a short) 3. How can I add more subtext as I feel what I have written is quite on the nose? Thank you for taking the time to read through and give me feedback. |