Treatment advising!

[dvdguy]

Hello filmmakers,

I have this assignment I need to do. It's basically a treatment that consists short overview of scenes. There should be 12 scenes (Maximum).

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HReE5PzHJPDesZPOAvCtv4Z75nUpw1br1Yip0U0ezBI/edit?hl=en_US

I'm asking for any suggestions that might end the treatment as the 3rd ACT, starting from scene 9. I just received criticism that the ending could be better, where I explain what actually caused FRANC to hate his son, JANEZ, and not forgive him even in case of unavoidable death. No flashbacks however, because Im not allowed too many scenes, only 3 for the 3rd ACT. I was thinking explaining the reason in the present time.

So ultimately, my question would be: What huge reason could set your father to hate you and not even forgive you in time of dying?

Here's the bio of JANEZ (the main guy): https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XNKn_F8lBPDS7KXB43xNzjLHUzDvKga74YQvLv7e1i4/edit?hl=en_US


Critics and improvements highly appreciated, if you could. I apologize for any grammar errors and mistakes.

Thanks in advance!