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watch Schoon Genoeg (Well Done) - 48HFP Dark Comedy

During the last weekend of august I finally participated in the 48 Hour Film Project :)
We had to make a dark comedy.
There were 44 teams, so there were 4 screening groups (A, B, C, D)
In group C we were 2nd runner up for the Audience Award, leaving 2 nominees for best film behind us :)
We also got nominated for best music and best use of line.
Although we didn't win any award, we are proud of the result.
(Yes, it is not perfect: I see a number of flaws. Some I should have noticed on set: I was the director I had to be more in control when asking about the focus. Lesson learnt: giving everyone the room to excel is good, but keep double-checking.)

BEWARE: it contains strong language.
The subtitles are in close captions.

I hope you can enjoy this :)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YQVL0bWNFL0
 

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That's great!

Was your line "Are you done?"

Didn't notice any focus issues, was captivated enough not to be technical.
 
Yeeaaah, this is good. Started half way through wondering why it didn't do better in the competition. Probably because the ending is too unclear. But boy is the acting excellent and the music has the optimal tone.
 

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Probably because the ending is too unclear.

The cleaning crew is sexually harassed by the boss so they smear the company name with overtly sexual interviews off hours.
 
.........Probably because the ending is too unclear...........

The ending is quite clear in Dutch, but it is impossible to translate it and let it have the same clarity and impact.
We actually got a view of reactions (from winning teams) saying that we had a very clear and rounded story, while many were vague or ambigue.


Yeeaaah, this is good. Started half way through wondering why it didn't do better in the competition. Probably because the ending is too unclear. But boy is the acting excellent and the music has the optimal tone.

Thanks!
There was some very very strong competition with large experienced teams and known actors.
The winner of best film, best writing and best actress:
https://vimeo.com/180513853
 

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Click CC for subtitles. They are on by default you must have turned them off.

Looks like he figured it out.
 
The one flaw and amateur films fell short of that is the actor (first one) looked into the camera. That should havr been edited out. Honestly, that's the only difference maker i can find.
 

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The one flaw and amateur films fell short of that is the actor (first one) looked into the camera. That should havr been edited out. Honestly, that's the only difference maker i can find.

The shot where he sits down is POV of girl #2, so he is looking at girl #1, then #2 not camera.
 

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You are right though as the girl sits but the camera is stationary so good catch.

48 hours and all. ;)
 
There was some very very strong competition with large experienced teams and known actors.
Intriguing. The winning film feels a tiny bit more solid and has a dog (always a winner), and watching their team, they feel very experienced. But I still like your more in that sens that where your film works, it's ahead of the winner. Yours is more composed. Loving the moment when both girls lean their chin into their hands. But not optimally written. Here's the problematic thing again with the twist ending (that amateurs love). It's not a good idea. Note how the winner has a twist one minute in and a solid punch at the end. That's a better strategy.
 

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Here's the problematic thing again with the twist ending (that amateurs love). It's not a good idea. Note how the winner has a twist one minute in and a solid punch at the end. That's a better strategy.

The one-joke film. You "knock knock" "who's there" your way to a punchline... in this case I feel it works, I had no idea where it was going. The problem is usually the twist is cliche, cheesy, or predicable, and the joke is drawn out too long.

This was all done in 48 hours. Solid!
 
Intriguing. The winning film feels a tiny bit more solid and has a dog (always a winner), and watching their team, they feel very experienced. But I still like your more in that sens that where your film works, it's ahead of the winner. Yours is more composed. Loving the moment when both girls lean their chin into their hands. But not optimally written. Here's the problematic thing again with the twist ending (that amateurs love). It's not a good idea. Note how the winner has a twist one minute in and a solid punch at the end. That's a better strategy.

There is one thought here that I don't agree with: namely that a twist ending is purely an amateur thing.
A lot of great movies have twist endings.
And most shorts without twist endings often make no real impression or just suddenly end.

About having 2 twists:
You could also say that our first twist is around 1 minute were the job interview turns out to be something else :P
 
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The one flaw and amateur films fell short of that is the actor (first one) looked into the camera. That should havr been edited out. Honestly, that's the only difference maker i can find.

Very observant.
We had to make hard choices: this was the best take for that part.
Cutting his eyes out was no option (no time for AE), cutting that part from the take was no option either.

Every take we shot the complete scene to give the actors space to grow into their role and to make sure we got enough footage while they are in the flow of the scene.
In hindsight there are more things that could have been better, but we squeezed every second of usable daylight out of the day to get enough footage to properly edit it.

It was a crazy rollercoaster: great fun while racing against the clock.
 
Very observant.
We had to make hard choices: this was the best take for that part.
Cutting his eyes out was no option (no time for AE), cutting that part from the take was no option either.

Every take we shot the complete scene to give the actors space to grow into their role and to make sure we got enough footage while they are in the flow of the scene.
In hindsight there are more things that could have been better, but we squeezed every second of usable daylight out of the day to get enough footage to properly edit it.

It was a crazy rollercoaster: great fun while racing against the clock.
Its cool and i meant my amateur films. Im just saying the judging my came down to something as petty as that.
 
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