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logline PLEASE I need help with my Script Title & Logline
- Thread starter sasha1984
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I'd use something Like "FAITH"
and change the longline to: after failing his duties as caring human, fate intertwines and sent him a second chance at love, honor and family
obviously you have to change it and sit on it, but it sounds better and more interesting this way. and then in your plot story you can write about mother and cancer
to prove my point read this:
Title- The Esoteric- meaning the unknown
Logline- What do you believe in?
Story- as John goes on his early morning jog, he discovers a body of a bloody man. While trying to check for a pulse, the man arises from the ground. John will never be the same again
or something like that...i didnt really put to much effort into that but i did shoot that movie in 1 day as practice run for myself
you can check the movie here
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zZuXrYiTfok
and change the longline to: after failing his duties as caring human, fate intertwines and sent him a second chance at love, honor and family
obviously you have to change it and sit on it, but it sounds better and more interesting this way. and then in your plot story you can write about mother and cancer
to prove my point read this:
Title- The Esoteric- meaning the unknown
Logline- What do you believe in?
Story- as John goes on his early morning jog, he discovers a body of a bloody man. While trying to check for a pulse, the man arises from the ground. John will never be the same again
or something like that...i didnt really put to much effort into that but i did shoot that movie in 1 day as practice run for myself
you can check the movie here
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zZuXrYiTfok
Thanks and it's not so much that he abandons his mother but he just....The story is about this guy, Josh, he has a mom with cancer and he's not there for her at all during her cancer and then when she dies, he's so guilt ridden about it and inside, he's looking for a second chance to redeem himself, to show someone else the love and support he never showed his mother and so with that, fate allows him to meet, Camilla, a woman with breast cancer, her ex-husband left her when he discovered she had breast cancer and so she's looking for someone to love and support her through her breast cancer and when Josh and Camilla meet, they fall in love and through her, Josh finds his second chance and through him, Camilla finds her love and support and together, she's able to make it through her cancer....Its a story I wrote in honor of my grandmother who passed of cancer.
i'm being honest here, but i feel like you are using breat cancer to much, my uncle died from cancer, and i lost my father to a heart attack, so i'm not trying to be mean.
you can write something
When John faced the harsh reality of death, he turned away and lost his mother, and when all seemed dark, he found his light in Camilla who herself is struggling through Breast Cancer, and together they overcalm, the troubles, and darkness in thier own worlds
you can write something
When John faced the harsh reality of death, he turned away and lost his mother, and when all seemed dark, he found his light in Camilla who herself is struggling through Breast Cancer, and together they overcalm, the troubles, and darkness in thier own worlds
OH my god, that is PERFECT! LOL cool, sweet, thanks
...and so with all of that, I'm thinking now on two titles of which I can name this story:
1) "A Second Chance"
2) Love & Loyalty (because both are what Josh never showed his mother and it's laso both of what Camilla never received from her ex husband)
Which title do you think fits better?
Because I'm not that smart tbh and so I can't really decide.....
...and so with all of that, I'm thinking now on two titles of which I can name this story:
1) "A Second Chance"
2) Love & Loyalty (because both are what Josh never showed his mother and it's laso both of what Camilla never received from her ex husband)
Which title do you think fits better?
Because I'm not that smart tbh and so I can't really decide.....
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Hahahaha, so after I read this through a bit, I thought you could use "Stricken" as your title, because of the line 'cancer stricken mother'.....it's vague but still connects to the story. Then I looked it up on IMDB to make sure it wasn't taken. There was one movie named 'Stricken' but that was it, and it was german, so I thought it could still work.
I read the description for that movie......it's about breast cancer too.
Yeah...haha
I read the description for that movie......it's about breast cancer too.
Yeah...haha
Or like "Through it all".....
Do you want something that kind of lends itself to the thought of love enduring past death....like 'Love Transcends' or 'Love Endures' or something like that? Less on the cancer part and more on the love and getting over his guilt part?
I want something that focuses on the cancer, the love and his getting over the guilt ...and the more I think on it..."I'm gonna love you through it" is the right title because he failed to love his mother through her cancer, she died, he felt guilty.....he meets and falls in love with camilla and with her, he gets a second chance to do with her what he didn't do with his mother - love her through her cancer.....so...I'm gonna love you through it....