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archived-videos 'Pit of Despair' - 10-minute Short Film (Shot in the Scottish Highlands)

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Graeme Noble

Hi Everybody,

This is a short film we shot 6 months ago while on holiday in the Scottish Highlands. The filmmaking is maybe not as 'crisp' as our films nowadays but its still a pretty decent effort. I'd still love to hear some feedback on this.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zPUn-h5unkk
 
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I liked how you played around with certain aspects of lighting and camera composition. I liked the flashback thing, that was handled well. But it was letdown by a weak script. The dialogue and acting was a bit 'Napoleon Dynamite'. It wasn't really coherent enough either. There were a lot of "What?" moments.

I don't know why, but that Burt guy was absolutely hilarious. You should do a comedy based around that character.
 
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