New movie tagline.. still no title..

[dlevanchuk]

So what do you think of this tagline for a short film:

"When a bitter shoeshiner discovers the magical powers within a mysterious device, his life could change forever"

Does this tagline give enough to spark the interest for the audience?

still working on the title..

 

[Alcove Audio]

Kind of awkward... How about "A mysterious device changes a bitter shoe shines life forever."



As to a title; hmmmm, let's see....

"Shoe Shine"

Nahhhhh, too Underdog.

"Polish"

Nope, could be a nationality.

"Heels"

"Soles"

"Leather"

"Shine"

Of course, you haven't named the mysterious device or the character, so either of those could be the title.

 

[dlevanchuk]

Oh, that sounds better. As always, got to stop overthinking stuff.

Great suggestions on the titles! I think I will go with "Time to Shine"!

Thank you, Alcove!

 

[brianluce]

i like it, especially that it's a shoeshiner. Such a modest occupation.

 

[dandevans]

"The Shining"?

 

[harmonica44]

The shoe shiner part does not seem as necessary. Do we need to know what the protagonist's profession is? Or does his job, actually have something main to do with the plot, and is not just backstory?

 

[dlevanchuk]

My protagonist has to hangout on the streets. It would cost too much money for a make up to do a believable hobo, but I do have a cool looking shoeshining kit
My golden rule is if my props cost me more than 20 bucks - I'm writing overbudget. And yes, I am extremely cheap hehe

 

[dlevanchuk]

Okay... How about This

A time freezing device tests ex criminal's choice for an honest life.

 

[Alcove Audio]

BTW, the person who shines shoes is called a Shoe Shine - not a shoe shiner.