archived-videos My first serious video

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Hi!

I just joined the community and was hoping to get some feedback on a video I created. It's my first attempt at anything serious. Any critique or comment would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks,
Jimi

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZLJGKd3jbhg
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Great first effort! I really liked the b&w/color contrast. The only thing I had a problem with was the narration of the poetry. It seemed a little rushed at times.

Welcome to the site!
 
Thanks

Thanks for the response WeightOnWheels! I agree with your ideas about the poetry. It didn't come across as well as I had hoped. Thanks again for taking the time to watch it and offer your thoughts.
 
the poertry threw me off as well. other than that, i really dig the B&W scenes, adding the color in there kind of gave me the impression this was a highschool project or something. I really think you should have stuck with one theme, as they contrast and conflict to much to my eyes.


the black n white scenes were very nice, very indie, very underground. Would have liked to see this with some music as the background.

just my 2 cents.
good work, keep shootin!
 
Nice job Jimi. I really liked the speeding up of the shots of the train. Very nice work for the first time.

Looking forward to seeing your next work.

Chris
 
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