I've been throwing ideas around for a project for a while now. The basic outline is below with the entire plot outline....
The whole short will be shot in a POV view (through our protagonist's eyes). We see his hands/arms and actions through his perspective. The short will be shot entirely as a single continuous shot (ala 'Silent House'. Apologies for the lengthy read but would love feedback as to whether this is worth developing further. To be shot with a Canon 5d mk2 with 16-35mm Canon glass.
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"A man wakes up alone inside a large pitch black room with only his wallet and a cellphone with no signal and no recollection of how he got there. Using only the light from his cellphone, he attempts to make sense of his unsettling surroundings. He opens the wallet - we see photographs of a young couple - male and female in happier times.
He finds the edge of the room after navigating with the light from his cellphone for minutes. He traces the wall, finding handprints and messages of despair. In the distance we hear unnatural sounds, rocks falling, shuffling. Something else is in this room.
Suddenly, a metallic shutter screams open - it is clear we are in a derelict warehouse. Our POV jolts to the direction of the noise, quite a distance away. The pitch blackness is broken up by the light from outside of the room creating a distinctive narrow burst of light in to the room. The light highlights a body lying inside the room, motionless. A silhouette of a large male stands in the doorway holding a large meathook. In one swift move he enters, plunges the meathook into the corpse and drags the corpse out before the shutters are lowered again.
Our character panics, sharps breaths. Once again in pitch black, we navigate around the room using the light from the cellphone towards the shutters. Suddenly, a disturbing noise - a female voice moaning - very close. We turn, the light from the cellphone illuminates a female lying on the floor of the warehouse, she is bound. Her eyes are wrapped with a bloodied rag. Her eyeballs have been removed.
Our character whispers "It's okay". He embraces her. She calls out the name of her loved one. We recognise the female is the same female as in the photographs inside our character's wallet. "I'm going to get us out of here". The pair discuss where they are, their location, and what the remember: nothing. The female recalls the man who cut her eyeballs was wearing a hideous mask. She breaks down.
Our character moves away from the female - sees a small crack of light from underneath a small doorway near to the shutter. Approaches the doorway, opens it cautiously. A poorly lit, neglected bathroom. Our POV, approaches the mirror in the bathroom. It is revealed our character wears A HIDEOUS MASK. He is now our villain. He smiles. Pauses. Our POV - moving along the bathroom counter to...a variety of torture utensils, blades, cutting equipment, a chainsaw. He selects a MEATHOOK. Blood stained.
He moves out of the bathroom, back in to the warehouse slowly. We hear the female moaning. Closer. The light from the cellphone illuminates the female. Our POV - holding the meathook high. Then...WHACK. Our POV, our villain falls to the floor.
From behind, another male - THE MALE IN THE PHOTOGRAPH releases the female, stands her up. Through our villain's POV, we see the male, the female, stand up...approach the shutters, raise them halfway and crawl under and out of sight.
We end on our character's POV still.....focus fading, slowly to black...just in time to see his hands open the wallet, caress the photographs of the male and female, illuminated by the cellphone. It ends with the cellphone light fading as we FADE TO BLACK."
Opinions?
The whole short will be shot in a POV view (through our protagonist's eyes). We see his hands/arms and actions through his perspective. The short will be shot entirely as a single continuous shot (ala 'Silent House'. Apologies for the lengthy read but would love feedback as to whether this is worth developing further. To be shot with a Canon 5d mk2 with 16-35mm Canon glass.
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"A man wakes up alone inside a large pitch black room with only his wallet and a cellphone with no signal and no recollection of how he got there. Using only the light from his cellphone, he attempts to make sense of his unsettling surroundings. He opens the wallet - we see photographs of a young couple - male and female in happier times.
He finds the edge of the room after navigating with the light from his cellphone for minutes. He traces the wall, finding handprints and messages of despair. In the distance we hear unnatural sounds, rocks falling, shuffling. Something else is in this room.
Suddenly, a metallic shutter screams open - it is clear we are in a derelict warehouse. Our POV jolts to the direction of the noise, quite a distance away. The pitch blackness is broken up by the light from outside of the room creating a distinctive narrow burst of light in to the room. The light highlights a body lying inside the room, motionless. A silhouette of a large male stands in the doorway holding a large meathook. In one swift move he enters, plunges the meathook into the corpse and drags the corpse out before the shutters are lowered again.
Our character panics, sharps breaths. Once again in pitch black, we navigate around the room using the light from the cellphone towards the shutters. Suddenly, a disturbing noise - a female voice moaning - very close. We turn, the light from the cellphone illuminates a female lying on the floor of the warehouse, she is bound. Her eyes are wrapped with a bloodied rag. Her eyeballs have been removed.
Our character whispers "It's okay". He embraces her. She calls out the name of her loved one. We recognise the female is the same female as in the photographs inside our character's wallet. "I'm going to get us out of here". The pair discuss where they are, their location, and what the remember: nothing. The female recalls the man who cut her eyeballs was wearing a hideous mask. She breaks down.
Our character moves away from the female - sees a small crack of light from underneath a small doorway near to the shutter. Approaches the doorway, opens it cautiously. A poorly lit, neglected bathroom. Our POV, approaches the mirror in the bathroom. It is revealed our character wears A HIDEOUS MASK. He is now our villain. He smiles. Pauses. Our POV - moving along the bathroom counter to...a variety of torture utensils, blades, cutting equipment, a chainsaw. He selects a MEATHOOK. Blood stained.
He moves out of the bathroom, back in to the warehouse slowly. We hear the female moaning. Closer. The light from the cellphone illuminates the female. Our POV - holding the meathook high. Then...WHACK. Our POV, our villain falls to the floor.
From behind, another male - THE MALE IN THE PHOTOGRAPH releases the female, stands her up. Through our villain's POV, we see the male, the female, stand up...approach the shutters, raise them halfway and crawl under and out of sight.
We end on our character's POV still.....focus fading, slowly to black...just in time to see his hands open the wallet, caress the photographs of the male and female, illuminated by the cellphone. It ends with the cellphone light fading as we FADE TO BLACK."
Opinions?
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