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Genesis,

You have a good feel for shot composition. Your graphics are nice too. Together though, there is no cohesion. You presented this video under the guise of it being a scene from a larger project yet in watching it, it felt like it was attempting to be a trailer (given the cutaways to graphics introducing the project). Assuming it is a trailer, it does not tell me much. You conveyed the character relationships fine. That did come across. I just feel like I viewed a scene out of a day in the life with music which seemed to foreshadow a rising action but it never came (which goes back to the fact that this is just one scene and not the whole project). All in all, you're off to a good start. I'm excited to see where you take it. Best of luck.

Happy Filmmaking!

Best Regards,
Anthony Mormile
 
thanks...yea its not a trailer or a teaser for that matter its actually the first scene from the film, just wanted to see what people think of the beginning.
 
I watched it but couldn't hear what the individual was saying due to the music being louder than the dialogue. Looks like it could be interesting.
 
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