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archived-vidoes How would you Rate Our First Film?

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R World Productions

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I Witnessed the Movie
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vq5R_PRbAts
 
Hey, so I definitely liked parts of it. Some nice camera work, solid acting, and at times the editing made things very tense. That said, a lot of the time I thought the editing was too fast, too many quick cuts back and forth with no time to build tension. It just became a bit distracting. Also sometimes I couldn't tell who was where, or what was actually going on. Maybe you need some more establishing shots to show who's standing next to who, or who's interacting with who. That said, the fact I didn't know what was going on or who was talking to who was kind of interesting as well. It made it more surreal and disorientating, like being in a nightmare. It felt kind of like a nightmare, with my disorientated spacial awareness and the super quick cuts, the blurry shots. The music as well is quite atmospheric in some points.

So if your intention was to create a dreamy nightmarish peice then it was quite effective, if a little too jarring and annoying. If you're intention was to create a more straightforward thriller then work on your editing a bit, let the tension build. Establish whats happening and then make what happens keep people on the edge of their seats.

Good job all in all!
 
I agree with rianlemon about the quick back and forth cuts. Adding to the disorientation was the darkness - not the mood, but the lack of lighting. This made it somewhat difficult to follow who's who and what's happening.

The story is clear and it's easy to empathise with the protagonist. I don't understand why the first part was relevant, i.e. the part before the protagonist became a witness, but that might be clarified in part 2.

The murderers reacting so calmly seems unrealistic. I'll admit that not only the murder, but also their ability to compress a maximum amount of curses into every sentence indicates an extraordinary disregard for society's judgements, but I imagine even the toughest thugs would run after the witness if the intention was to silence her.

I'm not sure I should trust that this is your first film. If it is, I'm impressed.
 
Firstly, congrats on completing. It's always tough to do.

Wearing my viewer's hat, I wanted to turn off. It was interesting but I wasn't there with you on this.

When I analyse 'why,' it just jumped around and I didn't have time to engage.

Technically, the camerawork is out of focus, not white balanced and underexposed. Whoever spliced it together has talent in that they created something out of these shots and the sound was clean enough.
 
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