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jonahbuckley

Hi Everyone,

My name is Jonah Buckley. I'm a graduate student studying mass communications. I shot this short a few years back to learn how everything works when making a short. I decided a month ago to re-edit it and send it to ifilm.com. They decided to show the film, so I thought some people here might like to view it and give me some feedback. Thanks a lot, and I hope you enjoy it.

Jonah

http://www.ifilm.com/filmdetail?ifilmid=2532781
 
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Ummmmmm ... very interesting ... I think.

Seriously, the short was well shot, the sound could've used some work (get rid of all that wind noise), and the ending was ... well, it had a twist to it. I won't say it was a nice twist, but it was a twist alright. The funny thing was I felt bad for the brother wearing the dress until the ending.

Good Luck.

Poke
 
The Film!

Hey Jonah,

Brilliant camera work / Fantastic compositions (filmic!) - loved background and foreground difference - and a very nice cut - wasn't to keen on the zooming in and out at the beginning too much though! But that's a personal opinion...

Like pokewow said, shame about wind noise on sound... thought of doing Foley and ADR? The story... not sure about some of the causes and effects... but anyway - Radical! Nice one!
 
Thanks for the feedback! I tried fixing the wind, but I'm not master. So I just left the audio how it was recorded. Feel free to tell a friend or give me tips on how I can get the short seen by more people.
Jonah
 
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