Briefcase (6 pages)

[dlevanchuk]

While I put work on my previous script (quite shy guy with stuttering), another idea quickly sneaked up..

Short 6 pages. I tried to keep the suspense and viewers interest as much as possible, so please please PLEASE tell me if it worked :-D

Briefcase - Short 5-pager.

Feel free to tear it away

 

[trueindie]

not bad. there's a longer story in it

You're just brimming with ideas right now aren't you ??

 

[dlevanchuk]

Haha yes, the beam is there.. too bad its like a china ball, rather than a laser!

As far as the story - I wanted to make a longer version, but I want to keep it short, and let audience keep guessing what exactly happened.
Wonder if it will work.