watch Aethon: A Short Silent

[TheJudge]

Hello everybody,

I recently made my very first short. (Have no experience at all )
I had absolutely no budget: just my own script and a camera (GH2), AND the help of my lovely girlfriend

The film is called Aethon, and it's a silent film (though not in the strictest sense, cause I use ambient sounds).

I'm eager to read what people think of it. So let me know

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=fn7lvDgS_ko#!

Kind regards,

TheJudge

 

[Ferguson Films]

Ummm im not sure what to think,
it looks like a version of The Terminator (but then again I couldn't read the subtitles)

2 things I would have changed regarding the filming.....

1) when the actor knocks on the front door, I would of cut to his view before he knocks - you have him knocking in the long shot and then his view of a door....

2) shouldn't he walk back to the light and dissapear? (but with out understanding the words on the screen - he could just be performing the same act over and over)

in regards to the black and white, I personally would have made it darker/less grey what I watched was quite 'dark' subject matter in a very light 'happy' black and white film.


I hope that feedback is welcomed.

 

[TheJudge]

Oh, I forgot to say that I added English subtitles on youtube

Thanks for the criticism you are right about the black and white.

The reason he doesn't go 'into' the lamp, but appears again out of nowhere is to show that it happens again. The same thing happens all over again.