A comedy short - feedback please?

[Sammy]

This is my first indie comedy short. I've done a few spec scripts too but this is only my 4th completed script... Any feedback would be great thanks!

Ok wow, just realized I cannot post attachments... um well PM me your email and I can send it to you. This isn't going to be very productive...

 

[Atras]

Hi,

One thing you can do is post your script on google docs, and then put the link here. Nonetheless, I'd be happy to read your script and give critique. You can e-mail it me at endlesshallproductions@gmail.com