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  1. Looking for fresh eyes on a TV Pilot

    This piece has been on the burner for two years in various forms. It's a collab, and I believe we're in the end game as far as revisions go (20+ major revisions). Any feedback would be appreciated. I'd consider a script swap if that would be of interest. I do prefer comments to be posted here...
  2. Quick help needed on a short (19 page) script

    Title: Love Undying Pages: 19 Logline: Five years after his wife's death, a man keeps an appointment with her. Made it to the quarters, and have a short window until semis. They're allowing revisions before the semi-final judges read. Any suggestions or help would be appreciated, if you've got...
  3. Fantasy/Drama Excerpt: Other Eyes appreciated

    LANGUAGE WARNING A little help (this sucks, this doesn't suck too much, etc.) with a small excerpt would be greatly appreciated. It's the last half of Act One of a spec TV Pilot script. A little backstory since you're joining part-way in. Gabriela (Gabby) Santiago (18), imbued with mysterious...
  4. Advice on Fight/Action scene

    I haven't written too many fight scenes. I'm enclosing a 6-page excerpt, so if anyone could take a look and give me some critique, I'd be extremely grateful. Context: Bad guy Zachariah has murdered young girl Ida's (10 years old) father and kidnapped her. Escaping through a wilderness area, they...
  5. Would Someone Be Willing to do a quick read of a Teaser?

    I'd be really appreciative if anyone's willing to take a look at a short, 4-page opening teaser to a pilot for a series. Any feedback would be welcome, but I'd be especially interested to know if it does its job, i.e., teases enough for interest in watching what follows? Muchos gracias...
  6. Script Swap

    Would anyone be willing to do a script swap? I've got a tv pilot (approximately 50 pages) that I'd like some basic feedback on and I'd be happy to return the favor. "Gabriela Santiago and the Seven Cities of Gold" Dramedy with elements of magical realism. Logline: A young woman with strange...
  7. Looking for Feedback: Opening 5 Pages

    Would welcome any feedback at all. Title: Gabriela Santiago And The Seven Cities Of Gold Drama/Fantasy Early first draft Muchos gracias, amigos! FADE IN: BEGIN FLASHBACK EXT. NEW MEXICO DESERT - EVENING A swirling sandstorm hisses and...
  8. Help with a short scene

    Hola, my friends. I'm currently working on a rewrite of my script on the poet Federico Garcia Lorca at the director's request. This is an added scene. Background: Lorca's plays and poetry were heavily influenced by gypsy legends, music and dance from his native Andalucia in Spain. In this...
  9. Parody: What it takes to be a DP

    Very funny parody on vimeo: http://vimeo.com/m/111403592
  10. Director attached to a script...

    So my feature script LORCA has generated a lot of interest. I was just contacted by a director who loves the script and wants to be attached. He has an amazing resume, and his music videos and TV ads are world-class. Problem is, I'm not sure what's involved in having a director "attached." I...
  11. Twin Peaks!

    Showtime has announced the return of Twin Peaks as a limited series beginning in 2016! Even though it was a bit of a mess in some ways, it proved you didn't have to produce TV episodes so they could be watched in any order, and thus began the golden age of narrative series. Coffee and a...
  12. Feedback wanted on a short scene

    This is a 4-page scene from my current WIP. Genre: Fantasy/Horror Brief Context: The archangel Uriel has manifest in the body of a young woman with amnesia. She's recovered parts of her memory and confronts her nemesis, the demon Dantalion, who has kidnapped the young man who found her, and...
  13. Miami!?

    I now know two filmmakers who've moved from L.A. to Miami. They swear it's a nearly untapped mecca for indie funding. Great weather. Beautiful locations. Lots of money and potential investors who haven't been either sucked dry or hit on 20 times a day, seven days a week, to fund a film...
  14. Inside Every DP is a frustrated Director?

    Interesting article on Indiewire: "Do All Cinematographers Really Want To Direct?" http://www.indiewire.com/article/do-all-cinematographers-really-want-to-direct-20140917 Their list of DP's who've turned to Directing is missing my favorite, Nicholas Roeg.
  15. Nicholl Sad Face

    So I had two scripts make it to the Semifinals of the Academy Nicholl Fellowships in Screenwriting this year and I just heard from them that I'm NOT one of the 10 Finalists. Anybody here ever make it to the Finals? I know judging can be incredibly subjective, but I figured I had a fair chance...
  16. Script Feedback

    Hi, Folks! It's good to be back! I see many of the usual suspects are still alive and kicking; great to see you guys again. I'd appreciate feedback on the following script excerpt. It's the first 25 pages of a feature horror/fantasy genre piece. Anything you'd care to comment on would, of...
  17. watch STRIKE!

    My union, the International Brotherhood of Teamsters, went out on strike against the American Red Cross two weeks ago. We're fighting for our lives, and for our very existence. The American Red Cross has been usurped by a new Board of Directors, mostly anti-union corporate executives from...
  18. Take This Lollipop

    Go to this URL: http://www.takethislollipop.com When you "click" on the blue lollipop you'll be asked to allow them to access your FB profile. They then take that info and create a creepy short horror film with it. Heavy usage has meant some downtime for the site. Keep trying, it's worth...
  19. Copies of Coen Brothers' Scripts

    Downloadable copies of Coen Brothers' screenplays: http://www.raindance.org/site/coen-brothers-suite Enjoy! -Charles
  20. Annie of the Thousand Lilies - Short

    Hi, good folks. If anyone has the time to take a quick look at my 6-page short, ANNIE OF THE THOUSAND LILIES, I'd be deeply honored and very grateful. Any thoughts are appreciated, and I've a thick skin, so be honest. -Charles Title: ANNIE OF THE THOUSAND LILIES Genre: Drama Pages: 9...
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