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  1. Constantin

    treatment Need help with PLOT and TREATMENT

    Thank you for the post and for sharing this with the forum. It must have been so difficult for everyone involved. My mother died shortly after going into a coma for 2 days from her brain swelling after a bad fall. There was also blood vessel damage and her condition deteriorated rapidly but I...
  2. Constantin

    treatment Need help with PLOT and TREATMENT

    Hmmm ... so let me see if your idea can be played out a bit further ... Father and mother have identical twins One twin is diagnosed with a congenital heart condition Father dies and family situation is troubled financially, emotionally etc etc Mother is unable to cope with both twins on her...
  3. Constantin

    treatment Need help with PLOT and TREATMENT

    Hi Jkds, yes, exactly! I did attach the first draft which you read for context but unfortunately it is just under ten pages so a bit much to read! As for why I stated it is nobler is actually based on reddit forum where a real life young teen wants to give up one of her twin boys because she...
  4. Constantin

    treatment Need help with PLOT and TREATMENT

    Thanks for chiming in. Someone who takes the nobler route would put both twins up for adoption and the less nobler one would put the sick one up for adoption I would think, An ideal scenario I am looking for is one where the 2 mothers and 2 misplaced twins are oblivious as my story works best...
  5. Constantin

    treatment Need help with PLOT and TREATMENT

    Hello...I have a rather interesting request. I am trying to write a drama about two identical twins that grow up to be teens, but unaware that they have been separated (either at birth or very shortly after). Originally in my first draft (attached), the mom takes her twins home thinking that...
  6. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Texas is the state, but i guess that can be changed
  7. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    i don't think so ...
  8. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Paper has the perfect cover as a trucking company owner and also provides funding for safe houses and such...Clive's motivation would be profit driven as I cannot see any other motive
  9. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    I have injected a scene right after PAPER gets off the phone with SCISSORS after his truck has stalled...CLIVE is in PAPERS office closing the receiver asking what's wrong ... PAPER tells him more delays and how the timing is bad and he is already losing money as it is .. .CLIVE offers to help...
  10. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Oh my god, this is beutiful .... I will use this ... GOLD!!! Thank you so much ... By the way, do you edit screenplay drafts? How much does something like that typically cost for, say, a 90-120 page draft?
  11. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    I don't mind the criticism one bit, you are helping me a lot...I guess what I am trying to convey in that dialog and in the story in general is the CHARACTER of Scissors. It's just a BACKSTORY. I still have two more back stories to do for the other characters so this helps me learn CLIVE has...
  12. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Clive is a co worker of Scissors and his friend...He knows him several years and knows Scissors loves his wife but the nature of his job being away a week at a time or more, he gives in to infidelity ... It has put a strain on his relationship with his wife Clive does this pimp stuff "on the...
  13. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    I have revised the SCISSORS backstory with the great advice given here. Once my artist completes the storyboard, I will provide a link. I am looking for any voice over, sound effects and music talent to collaborate with me on this project. If interested, let me know! Attached is the revised script
  14. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    You're right. I will keep the MATCH CUT to reinforce the connection between these two scenes, however I will remove directing terminology and use common language instead to describe how the scenes are connected...
  15. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Thanks StoneJack, I also thought of adding more of the theme of GAME and CHANCE into the script...For example, the invisible force prevents PAPER from killing SCISSORS almost as divine intervention...As if, SCISSORS has been CHOSEN and his fate is sealed to be the winner in the end ...I also...
  16. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Oops, so sloppy, I best be careful with that! Noted .. I will fix that I thought that when you first introduce your characters, you have some liberty with description of them. I will remove those as well I don't mind to remove most of those CUTS but with respect to the MATCH CUT, I needed to...
  17. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Here is my opening scene ... Any suggestions or comments is very much appreciated! (See attachment)
  18. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Nice article, thank you...By the way, I know of three movies that deal with RPS https://www.imdb.com/title/tt4420040/ https://www.imdb.com/title/tt0200046/ the last one is closer to what I have I think but it is in french and never knew about its existence until i starting my research. I...
  19. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    Yes, but are we not simply talking about semantics :) The gem you gave me was that there was an element of chance (which you're right is a better word) that was not in control of the characters..it was the invisible force that played the game out and it just so happened, SCISSORS is spared ...
  20. Constantin

    story ROSHAMBO - An idea for a limited 5 episode series

    That's exactly the point, a game has rules and it is as if there is some invisible force that prevents these rules from being violated. This is what I tried to do through the narrative of the story AT THE EXPENSE of some of the things you pointed out earlier, such as SCISSORS and ROCK living...
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