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    Should I remove laptop brand logos in short film?

    Hi everybody. I've shot a short film. Before shooting it, my producer assured me that I don't have to worry about logos and brands popping up in my short film. However, after shooting it and editing it, my Editor told me that he might be correct if the logo was popping up here and there. The...
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    Should I be directing if I want to write scripts?

    I know most of you will answer yes, because I should see how things work from the directing perspective. Well, I did. I directed 2 shorts and a shooting day at an independent feature film. So, as I said, I want to write scripts. Directing is great, too, but there are so many things to worry...
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    Feedback Request - short script - 12 pages

    Hey guys, I wrote a short script, I'd love to get some feedback before I go shooting it. Synopsis: A married couple of screenwriters arrive at a business restaurant to meet a Hollywood director interested in their script, yet they can't agree about the ending of the movie, so they want to use...
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    Can't choose how to light a dark comedy

    I'm planning to shoot a short film this summer. It's genre is close to Dark Comedy. It's about an unconfident teen with unrequited love, who goes to his psychologist and finds her on the ledge, trying to commit a suicide. Now he becomes the "Psychologist of a Psychologist" to talk her out of...
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    Psychologist of a Psychologist

    I have an idea for a short script. It's about a depressed guy with an unrequited love, who goes to a psychologist and finds her trying to commit a suicide. He saves her from jumping out of the window of her office, plans to go another psychologist, a sane one, but realizes she might repeat her...
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    Critique my short script - Edge of the Coin

    A prophet who can see only his own future, and only an hour forward, must stop his son, an ISIS activist, from blowing up a crowded mall. "Fate or Free Will", - this is the idea of the story. Two sides of a coin represent two choices given by fate, while "Edge of the Coin" is what represents a...
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    Short film idea - Edge of the Coin

    A prophet who can see only his own future, and only an hour forward, must stop his son, an ISIS activist, from blowing up a crowded mall. Premise: In a fatalistic world where free will is nothing but choosing from the given options, and every choice's outcome is predestined, a prophet who can...
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    Critique my short script

    A badly disciplined soldier struggles to prove his innocence against his Master Sergeant, after the latter has judged him for 20 days in military prison for a theft he didn't commit. This story happens entirely in a military base, so please forgive me for bad military slang (or lack of military...
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    Short film idea -

    A guy who works in Data Recovery service for mobile phones (or laptops), one day gets a laptop/phone of a famous married actress to recover, and finds there video of her having sex with another man. He and his friend decide to make some money out of it - to sell the materials to the media. A...
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    Short script idea - "a world where woman dominate" challenge

    I had an idea for a comedy short script. A desperate screenwriter has to have sex with an ugly and fat female producer to have her buy his screenplay. It was about Shay, "wanna-be-screenwriter" who can't sell a single screenplay, until one day gets an offer - have sex with the producer to...
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    Short script idea - what do you think of that?

    I have an idea for a short film, something easier to shoot than my previous idea. It occurs in a daily routine in a military base. It is about a soldier fighting for justice after being falsely judged for a theft. Based on my personal experience A badly disciplined soldier struggles to prove...
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    Need critique on my short script

    This is a revised script of a previous version. I need critique, mostly regarding characters, dialogue, and suggestions regarding the story. It's about a soldier delivering a coffin with a fallen army officer, who finds out that instead of a dead body, the coffin contains a suitcase with...
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    Courier - Need feedback on short film script

    Need feedback on short film script Need feedback on the short film script I plan to shoot this summer. Logline: A soldier who needs to deliver a coffin with a fallen army officer to his family, finds out that instead of a dead body, the coffin contains a suitcase full of Heroin, a loaded gun...
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    Need feedback to my short film idea (detailed synopsis)

    Here are the logline, the premise and the detailed synopsis for a short film idea (10-12 min). Any constructive critique or detailed feedback is appreciated. Before reading the synopsis, please read the logline and the premise, and tell me if it's well constructed and tells what the story is...
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    Feeling, meaning or situation - which of them is a good start?

    I need an idea for a short film (15 minutes), as fast as I can. I have 2 weeks to come with a final draft script (maybe not final, but something I can start working on it to shoot). I can start with a feeling I want the audience to feel (hope, despair, love, compassion, anger) I can start with...
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    Golden age of TV series instead of Cinema - true?

    You may ask how is this connected to screenwriting, but read on and you'll see. I hear many times people saying, - "The golden age of movies passed long ago. Now it's the golden age of TV series". In Israel it has come to the point that there are more TV series than movies you can find. But...
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    How to write under financial pressure?

    Well, I'm not a screenwriter, not getting paid for writing a script. I write in my free time. Sometimes, I feel like that constant pressure of the lack of money, everyday job, debts and etc - hurts my ability to write something. I guess, most of screenwriters come from high socio-economical...
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    Every single scene explains the whole script - is that possible?

    I'm a student to cinematography. Recently I was tasked to write a scene from within my script. I did. I was told that this scene isn't understandable. Who is who? Why? What? Where? Why should I care? Well, it's a random scene from within the script. It's not supposed to stand alone. Of course...
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    Job in filming industry as a bridge to further career

    Many students who want to be directors just shoot some shorts to begin their career. I think this is the best way to enter the industry and establish a career there. What is required to do that, is a script, a cast crew, and some thousand bucks for each short. Unfortunately, even if I get the...
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    "Mainstream" critique opinions

    For the last 2 month I'm working with filmmaking students on their films on various positions. Those people like to talk about movies (obviously:)). Me too. But then I see them saying exactly the same things about certain movies. And it happens that they all watch videos of professional critics...
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