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Without meaning to sound disrespectful, how would you write that line if it were you? The reason I'm asking is because my previous efforts (of which there are many) honestly sound shit to me! With a capital S. I just want it to sound professional, intuitive and 'to the point'

Not trying to get you to agree as such (great if you did though LOL), just enquiring whether you think there are exceptions to this rule. You know how much I value your opinion. The advice in this business is often conflicting with varying caveats. Character introductions being one example...

It's a little difficult to properly describe the character's world at this point in the script as it forms a major plot twist later on. i.e. the audience is meant to form one opinion of what is going on, only to discover at the end they were mistaken. It's a deliberate misdirection in other...

I understand there are alternative options to reinforce this point but in this particular scene, it is just a minor expression I want to convey. I don't want to make a big deal about the surprise or have her check a phone or batteries etc. All I want to get across is that she makes an expression...

Would you say it's ok to use a "thought" in the description if there is a synonymous (or obvious) action/reaction to such a thought? Things like "yuck", "ouch" or "that's weird" following the description of an event? I have a scene in one of my scripts where a character looks at a clock and is...

I don't think it quite works at the moment. I can see the kind of humour you are going for, and some bits showed signs of being funny, but for me, the biggest problem with it is actually the plot. The claw idea is so bizarre (and somewhat crude) that the characters' own silliness and...

Could you say something along the lines of "B is incredulous at A's ignorance"?

Rather than have the sheet stretch, why not have whatever it is attached to, bend instead? A tree branch seems the most obvious way to do it. You'd have the comedic effect of the branch flexing such that they are touching the floor but the rope is still taught enough that she's unable to release...

I know it's currently available on Amazon but you have to pay about 2 bucks. The episode is series 5 episode 3, "The Longest Night".

I was reminded of an episode of the British sitcom "Only Fools and Horses". The one episode takes place entirely in a supermarket. It's a comedy, but the premise around the time-locked safe could also work for a darker thriller...

People don't work for free based on promises of whether the project is successful or not. Not trying to burst your bubble here, but I think you need to manage your expectations. If you aren't planning to write the screenplay yourself, that needs to be the first thing you pay out for. People...

Hmm, that sounds a bit ambitious to expect all those people to work for free and instead basing their pay on end sales revenue. And what about the screenwriter? You seem to have omitted a rather important part of the production. A novel is not a screenplay and for all of the above to happen...

I'm not copying you LOL honestly. Posting the same thinking at the same time.

Another thing you can do if the sluglines seem to make the writing too busy is to use a full slug at the start and then shortened scene descriptions each time you move to a new setting. We will know it's part of the same passage of time and movement of the characters if done this way. For...

Might be best to just post what you've written so far so people can appreciate exactly what it is you are trying to ilustrate and advise what (if anything) to change. Whether a montage, or series of shots, or different slugs works best depends on what it is you are wanting to get across and in...

Your story is mainly about a ghost so I'm not too sure what you are asking with regards to it being too cliche? Do you mean your ghost is too cliche or that it's too cliche to have story about a ghost? I think @mlesemann has given you some great advice there, straight from the heart. Just to...

It's a bit like Skype or Zoom from what I can undesrstand. But with some more customisable features. And cooler, obviously LOL.

I think you could easily cut several pages from this to get it under your limit by just condensing your descriptions and actions. There's a lot of redundant words used. Take this scene: - INT. ROSE'S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS Meanwhile Thomas runs to her bedroom and tries to grab all the pills from...

When you say a draft, are you just meaning a basic story that you've written, and you are asking how to put that into a proper screenplay format? I'm assuming you don't currently own any screenwriting software? If not, I'd recommend downloading some freeware for now so you can practice writing...

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