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Habit, left over from the era of typewriters, many eons ago, when it was the custom.

Title: Love Undying Pages: 19 Logline: Five years after his wife's death, a man keeps an appointment with her. Made it to the quarters, and have a short window until semis. They're allowing revisions before the semi-final judges read. Any suggestions or help would be appreciated, if you've got...

Cool avatar! Cool concept! Go forth, brave and badass comrade; these are dangerous times and guerillas with cameras are needed now more than ever! Excelsior!

Imo, poetry conveys meaning and emotion with the use of various techniques including metaphor, simile, symbolism, subtext, etc. Films (the best films imo) employ some of the same techniques. That's what I'd call poetic film. The reference to film poetry is a pretty active subgenre where a...

La La Land is a Trump fever dream; its values are Caucasian and suburban, and it only works if you don't know An American In Paris exists. Hell Or High Water is Bernie Sanders. It featured an airtight script about cash on hand, finance, jobs, ownership, haves and have nots, desperation, and...

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"...with something already written that doesn't require money to produce." I've got a feature biopic of Spanish poet Federico García Lorca that won lots of awards, including a Nicholl semifinalist, but a line producer estimates it will cost $10 to $15 million to make, so I guess that's out...

Hey, Blase29 Actually, it's not "heavy dialogue" I'm concerned with. It's heavy dialogue exposition. By that I mean you're sneaking background/back-story information into the dialogue when that's NOT how people in real life would talk to one another. When I say it's "expository dialogue," I...

And which format is that? There's no official United Nations Screenplay Commission that sets formatting laws for the world. In general, he does follow formatting "rules" quite nicely. Sluglines, dialogue blocks, action descriptions, scene transitions, etc. are all within industry standards. His...

Hi, Blase29 The good news: You've got a good eye for imagery, which is important in film, and the story itself is a good one that deserves to be told; you've got your foot in the door to telling it by having the first draft of a script under your belt. The bad news: you commit most every newbie...

Hey, mlesemann! Thanks for reading and fair enough. Yes, every character appears again. While Gabriela is ostensibly the main char, it's an ensemble piece and the town and its residents are the real protagonist. I had thought wearing adult pampers because he "leaks" might be a good indication...

LANGUAGE WARNING A little help (this sucks, this doesn't suck too much, etc.) with a small excerpt would be greatly appreciated. It's the last half of Act One of a spec TV Pilot script. A little backstory since you're joining part-way in. Gabriela (Gabby) Santiago (18), imbued with mysterious...

Joey and Brian, many thanks for visiting and taking a look. I really do appreciate it. Feeling a little better about the scene! Cheers!

Sorry, Sfoster. Yeah, you're missing a previous scene because the above is an excerpt. Here's the previous scene: EXT. BESIDE A SMALL LAKE - DAY SAMANTHA (Sam) SANCHEZ (40), short black hair, sleeveless-T, cargo shorts, heavy backpack, follows a trail that...

Hey, Directorik Thanks for the comments. You are 100% correct; I couldn't agree more. To be perfectly honest, all-cap words have become invisible to me -- I don't even see them anymore. They've so proliferated since comic books started being adapted on a regular basis into feature scripts, even...

I haven't written too many fight scenes. I'm enclosing a 6-page excerpt, so if anyone could take a look and give me some critique, I'd be extremely grateful. Context: Bad guy Zachariah has murdered young girl Ida's (10 years old) father and kidnapped her. Escaping through a wilderness area, they...

Yo, Krios! Thanks for the kind words. I'd prefer to keep the outline private, sorry. Four Acts for a one-hour teleplay is pretty standard, although it varies. Unlike a feature, the acts are generally set up for commercial breaks with the exception of episodes on premium cable like HBO, STARZ...

Hey, Krios Well, if Syd Field approves, I'm happy. Cheers!

Thanks, Krios. If anyone's interested, here's a temporary link to the full 60 page pilot teleplay that the above Teaser is from. Comments would be nice, but not required. A simple "sucks" or "doesn't suck so much" would be fine. I'll leave it up for a few days. *URL edited out.*

Hi, Gregory I’ve read the first ten pages, which is all I have time for now. The concept is VERY ambitious and, despite some issues with the opening scene (page 1 through page 4), I like it a lot. Some notes on the issues I have: Page 1: I think the opening VO monologue is pretty long...