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This is what I understand is TECHNICALLY supposed to be the situation on capitals... 1. SLUGLINES AND CAMERA SHOTS (if there are any) 2. Characters when they first appear with speaking lines OR are critical (eg the guy in the gun store in DAWN OF THE DEAD is a critical character yet never...

"We fade in" - There is no WE in stage direction. Just skip the WE. No slugline. Blank lines after character. Dialogue too wide. Action and description too narrow. slamming his arms on the table is NOT a style of speech so should NOT be in parentheticals. "It's you fault I'm stuck her" -...

BEWARE! I found one company online (actually it is a one man outfit) - he offers feedback. I then found another advert with the same number offering to sell "new and original ideas" to movie companies. I found one script that someone had send it to be reviewed by him, then found the same idea...

Sounds like a lame bunch of unfunny slapstick with a bad taste and disturbing tragedy at the end, needlessly forced in the audience's face. Recommendation - Don't give up the day job.

Hi! because of my email, it often ends up in the Spam. Please confirm receipt of WALL STREET STAG Many thanks

Use some imagination - call it East Side Story or South Side Saga

Actually, BOTH come ABOVE first. When you are an outsider, not only do you have to match existing writers toe-to-toe, but you need to be BETTER than them and frankly, utterly faultless AND have a screenplay that is Oscar worthy, just to get made. Some jerk-off like Adam Sandler has the clout...

One dimensional characters saying tedious lines concerning subjects we dont care about. Cliche plot and subplot development where there is any. Hideous monologues makes much of it, particularly the mid to ending utterly unreadible. In fact, breaking up the monologues alone would be a vast...

A bunch of stereotype cliches, riding around being shot at by the authorities who are uncaring and stupid DOES NOT MAKE A MOVIE. We dont care anything about them and frankly wish that they all did die. This feels like nails being dragged down a backboard by page 65. UTTERLY UNIMAGINATIVE...

Second tranche... STRAIGHT FROM THE HARPER COLLINS DICTIONARY OF TRADITIONAL CLICHE LINES.............. Page 31- Dad, do you think this has something to do with... Page 31 - We need to get off the road. Page 31 Zach, Accidents happen. Page 32 Zach, we re going to be fine. Page 32 - I won t...

Hi, I have borrowed my girlfriends computer (which does not have a functioning question mark key!) so hereès my brutal review... Page 1 - Why famous - that particular vehicle famous - looks like waste of white space Without an insert, how does the audience know that there was no tip...

well, everything on http://www.docdroid.net works just dandy! No problem reading that.

Storypros? Anyone any experience of entering their contest?

- Twisted Alley? - Women's Independent FIlm Festival? - San Francisco? What was your experience like?

Does anyone know anything about the Westfield Awards? Has anyone ever entered?

1. First time a character is introduced, he should be in capitals. Tom is not. Non-existent description too. Are we talking about a 2 year old or a 92 year old? 2. The opening paragraphs are LUDICROUS MONOLITHS. These contain various different actions. It slows it down all as one. These...

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1. Description does NOT go in capitals. 2. Guy is slang. 3. Makes love? Is this a prono? 4. TELEPHONE not PHONE 5. Why the blank line after No compalints...? 6. i'm should be I'm 7. HUGE MONOLOGUES - WOO! LOUSY! 8. (beat) is a paentheitcal that goes ion a line of its own 9. CUTTING HIM...

Ask any industry professional. It is the SIMPLE ideas that make the dough. Your logline reads like the instruction booklet to the space shuttle.

Tell you what... Having suffered near death in at least one of thsoe, as well and all the accumulated giref... suppose I agree to that with you putting my name as a co-writer and I'll even supply more such stories and redraft and write part of it? (I can email you a pdf of my current US...