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    Courier - Need feedback on short film script

    No, I don't Curious, others can, but you seem unable to. If you can't cut it then maybe you should consider trying something else in the fast food delivery or street sweeping industries.
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    5 minutes, one scene short movie - the life coach

    You choose, you're the writer, however, despite what I said, be careful not to go too far in interrupting. You don't want it to sound like two people reading telegrams! Also, if patronising, maybe using other synonyms for wonderful rather than just hammering away at these two adjectives might...
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    5 minutes, one scene short movie - the life coach

    Word of advice... 6% of all money spent on lawyers in the US today is on cases relating to scientology. Any connection to either praising or condemning or relating to them makes your screenplay instantly utterly unsalable. NO ONE WILL TOUCH IT ---EVER!!!
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    LGBT themed short film

    There is an argument that, by stating and thinking LGBT you have made it a non-high concept. I am not gay, BUT I used to date a contact stripper for many years. What might have been considered "depravity" just a decade or two ago, became just normal run-of-the-mill for me with her female...
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    format Screenplay formatting question

    If you have reached the stage of writing a shooting script, you might like to check this for certain in reference manuals. FantasySciFi tends to spout off the top of his head and much of it is unreliable. You hardly want to ruin your work thanks to some dude on the internet who just makes it...
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    5 minutes, one scene short movie - the life coach

    REVIEW - Mister could be shortened to Mr. when you desperately need all the white space you can get in this scene. - I like the "May I" line, it is short and snappy way of getting over request to sit. - Could not "Alice and Michael walk over to Alice's Couch to sit down" and Michael and Alice...
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    Feedback on comedy script

    SOMETHING WONDERFUL ABOUT YOUR SCRIPT Whilst the format is poor and tough to read, it IS actually readible and locked in an illegible Google vault. I AM able to read each line without my machine seizing up. FOr this you should receive at least one tick and a thank you.
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    Feedback on comedy script

    Yes, I'm sure making up lies and telling someone something candy-coated is going to help them loads. Why don't you try relaxing before your PMS really gets on everyone else'e tits as well?
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    Courier - Need feedback on short film script

    YOUR REVIEW!!! ILLEGIBLE FORMAT - Not everyone can read this format. Not every format is illegible to everyone. This docbot thing seems to work, but Google? No hope Charlie. Send this to some other poor production company and it will simply get binned like this. In 2008, I was writing for...
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    1st Draft - Any and all feedback is welcome… even the crazy stuff.

    Actually it is more like... Lazy incompetent writer who is too arrogant to market his product possible buyers in theblind belief that a major studio is bound to buy it...Well, get with the market. 250,000 screenplays arrive in Hollywood a year of which only about 600 are made and only 200 of...
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    Capitalization in Screenplays

    1. SLUGLINES AND CAMERA SHOTS (if there are any) correct. Only use camera shots in a shooting script, not a spec. .....Whilst one should rarely use a camera shot in some raw instances, this is necessary. As I pointed out, the Mel Brooks CAMERA accidentally breaking the window itself cannot be...
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    Adaptation Question

    Actually, no. BEWARE: It does not have to be 2 years, it can be longer. That's how Andrew Lloyd Webber got royally screwed. His lawyer failed to check the contract which actually locked up his Phantom Of The Opera for a decade or more... so they just sat on it until he had to shell out...
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    Adaptation Question

    Andrew Lloyd Webber sold the option of Phantom of the Opera to a studio for peanuts. They then did not proceed with it and sat on it. So, when he had raised the cash to do it and asked for the rights back they said no. he had to BUY them back for $125,000, multiples of what he had been paid...
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    Near silent film

    There is a Film Festival called the 100 Words FIlm Festival. Only if you film has precisely 100 words does it qualify. Rewrite and draft it to do so and you have a guaranteed screening!!!
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    Is it okay to 'tell' instead of 'show' in this sense?

    The oldest advice in the book... CUT TO THE CHASE!!!
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    How can I show my protagonist's weakness in the opening if...?

    How about having him busy masturbating in the toilet with a porno mag as an opening shot.
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    Making a VERY Controversial Film

    How about making it a comedy Consider M.A.S.H. which actually conveyed the true horror of war without beig a documentary and everyone saw it. Also, if you show horrendous things going on and then someone is caught in real life, they will show a clip from your film and everyone will be inspired...
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    Show vs Tell

    The one thing worse that tell instead of show is to tell AND show. On these grounds, this is said to be why the film "42" is arguably the worst screenplay in history that ever made it onto the big screen: every time anything happens, even though you have SEEN it, all the characters go around...
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    Chicken Soup for the Screenwriting Soul

    I never cease to wonder how people think chicken soup makes you better. Didn't f**king do much for the chicken, did it
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    Capitalization in Screenplays

    I actually feel the opposite way. There are two Oscars for sound mixing as the Oscars began just months before the advent of sound in movies. in those days it was understood that it is absolutely critical, a factor that still is yet is so overlooked by everyone today, possibly apart, thank...
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