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On this we simply fundamentally disagree. Sounds were always put in capitals as it was considered vital to flag the sound engineers, whereas anyone can come up with props and costumes. Indeed, an entire generaton of playrights, particularly in London, wrote works designed to be on a minimalist...

You suggested a separate scene of rhte gun, I am merely suggesting ideas on how to weld it onto the fornt of the existing one. At the end of the day,however, you are the writer who should be finding a way. (Alternatively, off the top of my head, have you considered another thing other than the...

...Because writing in interrupted sentences forces you to produces partial sentences that convey the information swiftly to the audience without sending them to sleep with tedious long-drawn out waffle. Remember, actors are fundamentally lazy... just like the rest of us. If they can get away...

So, you dont think being told you've used a restrictive format is criticism but praise? Weird. Look, my time is valuable, I have a newspaper group to run, so if I spend my time sitting at home trying to review your damn script, I don't expect to have hasslebecuase I've told you where you're...

No. I borrowed a friend's computer to be able to review... so, if I am going to all the trouble to read and review someone's screenplay, something that 99.99% of agents and studios won't do, I do NOT expect to be foulmouthed by some bunch of arrogant punks with delusions of grandeur, strutting...

The word prostitute is too blunt. It is too, on the nose. How about him more hinting at that... say like asking for extras" or something?

Your description of Alice and Walters is weak on opening. Indeed, if you have Officer Walters described as being someone who looks anything but IRS or officialdom, it would surely enhance the impact at the end. Maybe if you checked up on descriptions of known serial killers, it would allow you...

Also, you state in the description "Life Coach Alice" - there is no way to convey this nor do you need to as she states it further down. Alternatively, you could have it on a business card. Also, surely it would not be a Ploice Officer in this instance, but a man from the IRS. So would it not...

Its the word TAKE rather than show or reveal is not too good. Also, you need the ending snappier. Why does he say "I'm oficer Walters" instead of, say, just "Officer Walters"

You misunderstand what I meant. I did not mean that he should come in and show her the tape recorded. What I meant was that when he does show her the tape recorder, yodon't use show her the tape recorder, you have him take it out. in such circumstance, the Police would be wired up so it would...

directorik is quite correct in the matter of underlining instead of capitalising for lines or words to be stressed or near shouted. However, itallics should not be used for this. Itallics are used for... 1. Foreign words or phrases not within the OED. 2. Names of newspapers and the names of...

My pleasure... and I do mean that most sincerely.

My pleasure...and yes, I really do mean that most sincerely.

- Why does he take the recorder out of his pocket? Might he not just show it? - Regarding my previous commetns, mindblowing is maybe going to far, but I do think yoy are on the right track there. CENTRAL PROBLEM - We are reading this scene in isolation. Without the rest of the script it is...

Why bother to go on a site, largely dealing with reviewing screenplays if you can't handle criticism? At least you have an appropriate username - behave like this and the idea of your screenplays ever being produced will certainly remain a total fantasy.

Maybe it would be more appropriate if you took an Anger Management Course to deal with your strutting arrogance.

...Exactly my point... which was actually a minor one, it was just that specific phrase might be better retermed. That was all. :) (PS Don't worry about the doubts, you are doing well)

What ask for reviews if you can't handle the criticism?

Sir, I am fully aware of my fading eyesight and do not claim to be some sort of Messianic figure with all the answers. What you seem to fail to understand is that this person has moved way ahead on his project and it is IMPORTANT to him and his career. Taking advice from some guy who's...

Sir, you're objective evaluation consists of nothing more than vicious ad hominem attacks and you idea of creativity amounts to liberal use of "FUCK" - neither of which appear to add anything of use to discussions.