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Oh yea I know. I’m just saying that’s his profession. Makes it better than if he was just a regular dude

I get what you're going for. I think I'll make Dale a private investigator.

Thanks. Yea like I said, I've never been good at these.

Wow, that's fucking nuts. By the way, here's a logline...which I'm not very good at. I'm also a few pages into the story. After pursuing multiple leads regarding his missing sister, Dale finds himself in Harper, Kansas. Run by a sheriff accused of corruption, he is certain answers lie in this...

Ah, the ol' "hooker who feeds info to the cops to avoid being arrested" thing. Haha. I know what you mean. I have to also consider how to introduce the antagonist. The traffickers won't be shown, just the pilot who lands in Harper with new girls from time to time. So I think the actual story...

I'm not familiar with that. But either way, the "man taking things into his own hands after the law fails" is pretty common. The only differences are the location and the crime in question.

True, but I've settled on Dale tracking down leads. He'll be running a sort of "command center" out of his motel room. You know, tacking up a big map of the US with the typical drawn out notes and circled cities. That way the message is conveyed that he's been at this for a while. It would make...

Possibly, but a bit derivative at the same time. Having the missing girl be a resident of the town is what makes the stories too close. I'm going to stick with Dale tracking down leads that come in through those tip lines you'd see on the news. This one just happens to pay out.

Alternate take on what you suggested... Dale hasn't been home in say a decade, and is unfamiliar with the current sheriff. He gets a phone call from his parents saying that his teenage sister has gone missing like a month ago. Dale is upset that his parents didn't call him right when things...

That's the thing. The only plausible way for Dale to get there is if his little sister used to live there. I'm not sure. Or simply someone supposedly saw her there, and Dale is so desperate that he's following even the smallest of leads. Maybe he's done this before and followed through with...

Ahh ok. So with this angle, Dale willingly enters the town in search for his sister. He’s heard of the traffickers using Harper as a refueling spot and wants to check it out. But sadly for him, the only law in the area is under investigation by a higher authority. Dale doesn’t want to involve...

I'm a sucker for the same types of movies. But I'm more attracted to the stories where the lead is the "seemingly incapable hero," as in the recent Sweet Virginia. Another small town thriller but told from the perspective of a long time resident, dealing with an unknown person entering the town...

Yup, thanks for that. I will definitely include little things like that. I have a couple of friends that live in Kansas that I've been pestering about small town details.

Thanks. I might scrap most of it tho.

I do need to include a female character. I mean shit, the goddamn sheriff could be a woman, or a woman could run the airfield.

By the way, I’ve written a 4 page intro already but now it might change. It goes over the accident that will set things in motion. Some minor tweaks here and it’s srill usable. https://drive.google.com/open?id=14o3cKrM0FP4IPsa5B2a0VdFTRb_vs9zH

I'm telling you, these small ass towns are interesting. haha.

I could just make the Sheriff's brother own and operate the airfield. One night this brother saw something he shouldn't have, and the person in the plane offered a deal rather than just killing him. He keeps the deal secret from his Sheriff brother and here we are. The person who got hit by the...

Haha you know it's hard to tell if you're mostly sarcastic when you post or if you're actually interested in other's drivel. Here is the actual airfield. https://goo.gl/maps/PN98g3NZ3o82 Seriously though, Harper is in the middle of fucking nowhere.

My story is obviously different enough, just an odd coincidence that a current HBO show takes place in small town Missouri and follows someone trying to find out what's happening.