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    logline Logline Critique, please and thank you

    The real issue is that there is too much conflicting information to be found on the internets. There are no rules. While that sounds O.K. on paper, in reality that just means that no one agrees. It's not anarchy, it's chaos. I'm imagining a Hollywood under some form of governmental regulation...
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    logline Logline Critique, please and thank you

    Because on another forum some people complained that the first logline was too confusing and needed to be stripped of all flesh before it would be acceptable to be shown in public.
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    logline Logline Critique, please and thank you

    I truly despise loglines. Below is the butchered, bloodless carcass that describes next to nothing: An independent inventor develops the first faster-than-light drive to take humanity to the stars, usurping a solar system of greedy corporations and vengeful governments.
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    logline Logline Critique, please and thank you

    For a steaming sci fi series. I've crunched it about as far as I can by myself and wanting other eyes. Cheers. Under the specter of interplanetary war, a wealthy inventor leads a team of top scientists and intrepid adventurers against greedy corporations and corrupt governments to perfect the...
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    dialogue Repeating Parentheticals?

    I'm indicating where a characters voice is coming from and I want to know, do I need to keep repeating on every bit of dialog? Is it acceptable to provide this parenthetical on the first bit of dialog and then not mention again unless the situation changes? Here an example: CHARACTER A (via...
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    "Hello. Keep calm, answer the questions, and everyone will get out of here alive."

    Seeking a decent place to discuss screenwriting. I hope this is it. Like so many others, I bash on scripts. As of joining this forum I've written three movies and several episodes of a series. Sold none of it, but haven't tried to. Looking to get better before I start getting aggressive. How...
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