Recent content by VanillaThunder

Thx for the feedback! Your critique is valid and if you read the updated, longer, version on the synopsis posted 2 spots above your answer, that problem is adressed. Watching a fictional character to through the fire without change feels meaningless, did this story not even change a FAKE...

Right. I certainly don't prescribe any type of method, I'm just repeating what Blade Snyker says in his book.

Here is an expanded synopsis with all the structural elements described. <===ACT I START===> SETUP 0-10% Life is good for Thor Thorson. As a happy father of a 5-year-old daughter, an appreciated teacher at the local elementary school, and a skilled MMA fighter – Thor is kicking ass on a daily...

Thanks for all that input. Maybe all that stuff after MY ending could fit for a sequel.

It's interesting that commented that since I have considered whether to make the kidnapping targeted, or random (first victim that fits the criteria). As it stands right now in the script, they took a girl of around that age to sell off to human traffickers. So "random". The girl dies in the...

Your critique is fair and I agree with you 100%. I had a longer 2-sentence logline that I played around with before: As a pro MMA fighter’s daughter is kidnapped and killed by a powerful pedophile ring, he has a mental breakdown. He must break out of the high security psyche ward, run by the...

Thanks for the response. I'm new to this game so my plan will definately change over time. But currently I do these three and then write a treatment, which is a detailed outline like you mentioned. I did write a treatment for this story, as I've worked with it for a couple weeks now. Any...

From what I gather in screenwriting books, it's a common mistake to start writing the screenplay before you have a good title + logline + synopsis. I think of this as the 3x combo. Therefore, I'm not starting before I get feedback on my project. I see this as a drama/action/comedy. Title: The...

Hey! I have experience writing professionally and recently decided to get into screenplays. I read books and study 1 film a day. My "literary" talent is very high but my "story" talent is pretty average. Would be cool to partner up with someone who had the opposite strengths.