Recent content by ricketybridge

Casey: good point on Rachel Getting Married, but technically, she still doesn't have a clear external objective. I'm getting the suggestion to essentially move what happens in the third act to the first/second elsewhere as well. I'm warming up to the idea. Thanks for the feedback!

Sorry, just one more quick question. What would you guys say the logline would be for Rachel Getting Married? (Which I hated, so I may actually be proving my own point.) ::SPOILERS:: Although she says she wants to "make amends" with her sister, she does little in the pursuit of this...

indietalk: I'm sorry, but making disparaging remarks like "sounds like a Lifetime movie" just isn't helpful. Moreover, Lifetime movies are legitimate works that people actually make money doing. So what if this is a Lifetime movie?? If you don't watch them, then that's your prerogative, but...

Okay, how about this one? A aimless young woman’s troubled past threatens the stability of the present when going through all the stuff she’s stored in her mother’s garage unearths painful memories.

Hi everyone, I'd love some feedback on this logline: Clutter - Drama When a young woman has go through all the relics of her past in her mother's garage, she’s forced to confront the painful secrets of her self-destructive teen years.

What's threatening his pregnant wife? I would cut the reference to THE PLAYER. I would just do: A newly arrived Indian screenwriter struggles to make his mark on Hollywood. Sounds like a really interesting project; the time sure is ripe for it. Again, cut the reference to another work...

Buddy and Filman--thanks so much for your input! :)

Really? No feedback on this? Is it too long? Okay, here's a shorter version. I'd really like to know what you guys think... LILA (26)'s MOTHER (55) asks her to to clean out all the boxes of stuff she's accumulated in the garage over the course of her life. When Lila balks, her mother gives her...

I love this advice--and how you put it. It's so true. :)

It's hard to respond to this without knowing any further details. You say the problem is that they can't meet in private, but then you say they have a chance to meet at the midpoint. So what's the problem?

Hi everyone, I just completed the outline for the screenplay I recently posted the idea for and just wanted to get some feedback.... It'd be awesome if you could let me know which parts you thought were strong, which were weak, if the story as a whole interested you, if it bogged down anywhere...

I'm not offended--I'm just saying if you expect this script to be considered on any professional level other than the film production wing of the KKK, you should probably avoid using both the n-word as well as "negro".

To me, what's missing from this is objectives for your characters. I mean, they says "I want to be a tree" or "I want to be a human", but they don't act on those desires. We just see them having a chat, and then going off to be reborn. Where's the conflict? Yes, there's a little irritation...

Firstly, using the n-word in description, as opposed to a character's dialogue: not cool. You start off with a really vivid description that could no doubt make for a beautiful opening shot, but it includes a lot of information that's backstory and which we can't see, which is a no no. It's...

I agree with directorik that there really is no best answer to the question as you put it. It depends on how good the material is. If you write something that's better than any other script you find, then I'd make that. If the reverse happens, then go with the other script. On the other...