"I won't get into the rest of it in detail... Just feels like the conversation is a little forced -- contrived. I get that THIS victim is NOT the usual victim. I get that but the dialogue feels a little too on the nose and not quite clever enough."
Please give me more detail. Your giving me...
I can do rewrites.
What I met to say is that, I'm going to shoot this for two days.
Filming starts in July, so if I need a complete rewrite, I will do it.
Hello,
Need constructive criticisms. What changes do I need to make? The length is for budget reasons. We are filming this for two days.
Genre: Comedy/Dark
Pages: 7
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xMe5x9GWt1VvaFNY0KHJnU9Y9Bs_mD3v/view?usp=sharing
Thanks