Recent content by deleted

I like the twist in the end however the pacing in the last act is off for me. It feels like Leetal is doing more than 2 minutes of work, while the guy who turns out to be the driver is walking slower than an 100 year old man with a walker. Also Leetal's sudden change in attitude towards Yoni...

Thanks for the feedback! Really appreciate it. What about for feature writing? Is it better to have longer paragraphs?

Haha thanks. My name is actually pretty normal in my part of the world. Not John Smith generic, but maybe not more unusual than say a Dean Johnson. Haha, but I am the director too!

https://www.reddit.com/r/explainlikeimfive/comments/2dmx6f/eli5_how_do_deafmute_people_call_the/ https://www.quora.com/How-do-deaf-people-call-the-police These resources will help with your situation of Daniel calling 911 and making it more realistic, I'm sure deaf people will appreciate the...

I love the story and how you describe things, it really gives atmosphere. However a few things There are a few scenes which feels like there should be dialogue because the descriptives are something that while great to read, can't readily be translated to audio visual. For example, when...

Ah ok, i understand now. Thanks! I've always thought of one paragraph as one shot which is why i use a lot of paragraphs.

Thanks for your feedback! Really appreciate it. The continued is auto-formatting by celtx, not sure how to get rid of it. I don't quite understand this, could you elaborate please? Alice isn't a nice person unfortunately, and would rather increase her own chances of surviving. You have a...

Hey guys. I'm practicing writing some shorts while I finish up writing a feature. Any and all feedback and criticism is welcome. Need to brush up my skills (including how to write loglines! ) Logline: Power and reception is out at an office as an unknown disaster hits the city in a distance...