Recent content by Adversary2015

Im in need of a Gaffer, and Sound Mixer for my short thriller "Adversary." Synopsis: Ira is 17, and lives with his grandfather. Their pretty close, they eat breakfast together every morning without fail. But more recently Ira's grandfather has been acting strange. He's been staring in Ira's...

Does anybody know a good website to find crew members? Im in need of a gaffer. Thanks in advance.

I know I'm an amateur, but I'm going to read over your script and give it a critique.

Here's my most recent draft. You guys have been a saving grace. I should list you all in the credits of the finished product. https://www.dropbox.com/s/viv5czoqkk940d2/IndieTalk.pdf?dl=0

The part about finding Grandpa dead, and the rat poison pills is gnarly. How did you come up with that? That takes this script to another level.

Okay, here are the revisions I made. https://www.dropbox.com/s/qs16mjblmk9gye6/Advesary%20Indietalk.pdf?dl=0

Hmmm. Interesting, It's such a short film, I don't know how I would go about doing that without me putting an irrelevant scene in there. I can't do a flashback to when he is a lot younger, because than that would require an additional actor.

Thanks for your helpful advice. You said " I would think that a good use of Justine would be for her to come to see Ira. She finds him boarded up and grandpa is dead, perhaps. She calls 911 and the police come. " Question, how would grandpa be dead, or murdered if Ira is boarded up in the...

I read your message, and tried to apply your critique. Thanks for the feedback. I fixed the previous link I posted.

Here's 13 pages. I made a few changes, I'm still thinking about how to tackle the rest of the script. Whoops, fixed the link. https://www.dropbox.com/s/qs16mjblmk9gye6/Advesary%20Indietalk.pdf?dl=0

Thank you so much for your critique, I understand I have a lot to learn, I'm just glad someone is taking the time out to help. I write everyday, I just started writing screenplays a few months ago. It's been a lot more grueling project than i could of ever imagined, but it brings me pleasure in...

Here's my script, I know I'm going to be making many more drafts, but you all can at least help guide me in the right direction. https://www.dropbox.com/s/sl8f8ugiwk6ahuj/Adversary.pdf?dl=0

That is a whole lot to take in. Thanks for taking the time to break everything down. After fixing the spelling, grammar, and sluglines, I think I'll just post the script so it can get dismantled. I mean I made the script for me to direct, but I understand that grammar and format have to be...

Yeah, I did think about that, but going that direction will deter from the twist at the end. I might need to personally send you the full script.

This is one of the downsides of only posting part of the story. Yes it seems like a perfect world, but that is not really the case. Ira's grandpa has more than just PTSD, he has severe bi-polar disorder, and what motivates him to harm Ira is explained later in the story. It's a new revelation...