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These are really really good notes. I really like your suggestion about writing the list out to contain a few more forms of death. As for the word bump, I've always heard it used to describe movement either direction. I'll make sure and take a look at though because I'm certainly not good at...

Those are all interesting thoughts. I was very concerned about making what was happening clear and worrying that people wouldn't get it. Maybe your right and I need to make it a little more less clear at first just to keep the mystery. I really liked the Erotic asphyxiation line though because...

I'm glad it was intriguing, I really wanted to grab attention with the opening scene, and get people curious about what's to come. I tend to be very picky about what I write, but this is one of the first things I had confidence in so it's good to hear from at least one person that the confidence...

I've wrote a couple practice screenplays and now I wanna turn this one into a feature length screenplay. I'm pretty happy as a writer with this first draft of the opening scene but I need feedback from people with more experience and knowledge than me. Don't be afraid to tell me if it's utterly...

I don't plan on using all. I thought maybe 2 or 3 depending on what the cost came out to be. My budget is decently high for being independently funded. I'm just glad to hear they're good choices, fitting them into the budget is the next thing but I'm not too concerned about that

I'm currently writing a screenplay that I plan to film about 2 Teenagers on a road trip to meet one's favorite celebrity. It's gonna be funny, but also sentimental and sweet. I want it to have an early 2000s feel but I don't want it to seem dated if that makes sense. I put together a list of...

It's mostly practice but I'd consider shooting it if it amounted to something. Typos are definitely something I'll go back through and fix. I think I overwrote details because people the first time around told me the story wasn't clear. I'll see how I can go about fixing that. Thank you for your...

Just doing it for practice. Could possibly ending I'm sorry I've been driving and must've deleted it on accident. Its back now if you still wanna look it over for me

Okay so I posted the first version of this screenplay awhile back and it was utterly panned. I went back through and rewrote about 80% of it and honestly think it's much better now but still need feedback. This is the first screenplay I ever wrote so I'm still not entirely sure what I'm doing...

I really appreciate the time you took to write all that out and I think there's alot of good notes in there. I've always had a tendency to leave endings bleak and I think alot of times it doesn't work. I played around with the idea at the end of bringing the daughter back as an adult to sit with...

I'm actually going to change "Diet Coke" in the script and just specify it's her favorite soda because it being a specific soda just allows people to miss the entire point. It's not about advocating for that soda, It's about seeing how their relationship grows but they appreciate the little...

The general idea in my head was to develop the characters through the plot and their relationship rather than dialogue. I wanted the characters to not have names and to just be general people to drive home the point that 10 seconds can completely change a life. I felt as though a lot of dialogue...

I just finished a very rough first draft of my ever screenplay. I wanted it to be something simple, so I decided to have the entirety set in a fast food restaurant. Now that I finished I feel it definitely needs work and to be polished but as somebody new to screenplays I don't exactly know what...

I haven't been on this website very long, but I'm already loving it here. I didn't expect my first post to get any attention and honestly thought I'd be talking to a wall. Thank you for taking the time to help me out and show me tools that will guide me. I look forward to getting deeper into...

My name is Andrew but I go by Ronin to most people. I've been obsessed with movies since I was about 4 and always dreamed of making my own. Growing up I had insane abilities to write stories of all kinds and always did in my spare time. As I got older I lost my ability and I'm really trying to...