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Yes, I didn't mean it like it's quiet so I don't need to worry about sound, but stuff like footsteps, opening and closing doors, would also be very noticeable. Good point about having lots of warning though.

Yes, definitely! I picture (hear) this world as very quiet actually. All the civilized spaces don't have much going on and it's a very eerie silent space, that makes it all the more unnerving when gangs show up in loud jeeps, yelling and throwing molotovs. I will see if I can get that feeling to...

Alright, I'm gonna take a stab at rewriting the first episode with these things in mind. I'll post it as soon as I'm done. Thanks so much for all the feedback so far! All of the points are great and while I feel like I have good reasons to do the story the way I've done I'm trying to force...

Okay, that could definitely work. I don't know if I'd be able to fit a 'journey' of sorts to reach the man in the first episode, but maybe it would be better to end the episode before they decide what to do with the man and the machine. I'll definitely have to try that out. EDIT: The challenge...

Fantasy SciFi mentioned this as well, but I don't know how to get around this problem with this story. In my outline of the season there is a general episodic structure in that there is a major reveal or character moment at the end of each episode. I'll lay it out here: Episode 1 - Discovery of...

Thanks so much for your in-depth answer. You really took the time to analyze it. A couple things first, though that were probably my fault for not making clear in the script. The attack on the station that Joseph mentions at the beginning was just a joke. That is why Joseph sits down calmly and...

I've posted these scripts on another thread, but I made this one to specifically address the issue of dialogue. As I was skimming through them I noticed that most of it is dialogue, barely any description or action. While I might be able to account for most of that with the fact that I'm writing...

Alright that makes sense, I got ahead of myself. I switched up the dialogue so Joseph asks if it's some sort of virtual reality and Chuck tells them it's a time machine. Do you mean the two quick scenes at the beginning, before the interview with the old lady? Those are supposed to be vague...

Episode 2 Script I didn't think I'd want to start a new thread for each episode so I'm adding the script for the second episode onto this one: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BwG3a1ofIz5VU2RzTFhfOWJMdW8/view?usp=sharing Again, let me know what you think and mainly if these first two episodes...

I think it's just a judgement call. If there's a reasonable way that the cops could figure out, then the filmmakers decided not to show it in lieu of showing other more interesting scenes. I haven't seen The Chaser, so I might be totally off. If a big part of the movie is figuring out where the...

True. I will probably just change this up to make it more relevant and clear.

I guess I should add more between lines to specifiy that a pause has occurred. In my head, Joseph takes time to put the pack away and is smiling to himself, taking up some moments before he moves on to the next topic of 'You jump higher every time". I'll have to reread it, but yes, it might seem...

Not overused in my script, but just in general with movies/stories (honestly it isn't overused that much, but I understood where he was coming from.) He was asking for a light. It's kind of a running joke between them.

I guess what Filman was saying was that it's kind of overused (not really, but it's a little bit expected). I could do with or without the line, I think it will depend on how the actor says it. But yeah, it's not a big deal.

May I ask what the project is? A short film?